Fields

Recently wrote this poem. 2024 Rhyming Quatrains in 10-Count

 

 Fields....

   

   Lavender fields fill my visions of you ...

   longing your safe arrival home to me,

   knowing our love will remain always true; 

   stand, watching as tall waves drift out to thee.

   Hard rain appeared at once with no warning;

   my worries of you become uncontrolled …

   taking deep breaths as night becomes morning,

   watching as the moon changes yellow to gold.

   

   Suddenly, from a distance boat sails appear;

   now, I yell to the sky, "Dear God, thank You!"

   His boat swaying about, as without fear …

   my true love is saved 'gainst dark ocean spew.

   Kisses tell my story from long ago,

   when a sailor left for the open sea ...

   never knowing if my true love would show,

   awaiting patiently for only he.

Author's Note

If by chance you read my poem I would appreciate a review.
I always review all the works I read.
Thank you,
Lisa

Reviews

[Soren]

Lisa so glad to have heard from you. This poem speaks of patience rewarded, prayers answered, love returned. Taken at face value it reads wonderfully with great rhyme and rhythm but it speaks deeper as a metaphor for all those who await fearing the worst to be rewarded in the end for their patience and fidelity. Nicely done

[Lisasview]

Hi Soren,
And thank you so much for your very kind review. It has been ages since I last wrote or posted a poem...
Hoping to get back to it...
Lisa

[Bhuyanshi Talukdar]

Your poem is very emotional and beautifully written. The way you describe the lavender fields and your longing for your loved one creates a vivid image in my mind. The line "knowing our love will remain always true" is particularly touching and shows the depth of your commitment to your partner.

The sudden appearance of hard rain and your worries about your loved one add a sense of tension and uncertainty to the poem. The way you describe taking deep breaths and watching the moon change color is very poetic and creates a sense of calm in the midst of the storm.

The appearance of the boat and your relief at your loved one's safe return is a powerful moment in the poem. The line "my true love is saved 'gainst dark ocean spew" is particularly striking and shows the danger and risk that sailors face on the open sea.

Overall, your poem is a beautiful tribute to the power of love and the strength of the human spirit. The way you describe waiting patiently for your true love to return is very moving and shows the depth of your devotion.

[Lisasview]

I feel lucky to have you reviewing my poems... Your insight regarding the true meaning..is wonderful.
This poem just came out of me early one morning...
Often I feel as though I am not writing my poem but that a power larger than me is doing it....I wonder if you might like to read Innocence... This is a poem filled with metaphors. I awoke one morning and immediately sat down to write it...I do explain my thoughts about my poem in my authors notes.
One reviewer left a very wonderful review which I think you would also really appreciate.
Thank you again for your review...
Lisa, in Madrid

[Lisasview]

Good afternoon from very hot Spain,
I have not been writing for the past few months.
I decided to go back to all the many poems that I have written and posted on Writers Cafe to make sure I had thanked everyone for their reviews... So easy to miss one or two.
By doing so I am inspired by the reviews, especially yours and E.P. Robles as they clearly describe what my poems mean.
When I write I do not ponder what I am going to say... every word just pours out from me and often, although never planned, my poems are filled with metaphors...which many do not understand.
So thank you again for the time you have taken to read and review (in depth) my poems.
Lisa

[Neville]

having read these finely placed words of yours, the single word intoxicating springs to mind & that my fine literary friend is my very bestest interpretation of this most beautiful of poems ... Neville now decided to leave his face as it is until tomorrow at least x

[Lisasview]

Wow Neville, what a wonderful thing to say... I am humbled by your words..They inspire me to write more.
Hope you slept well...
Preparing for 6... for a special dinner party..
Lisa, should be preparing and not on the computer!!

[Neville]

.................... enjoy :)

[Temperance]

The love and worry come through clearly in this poem. Great imagery that puts us there casting our eyes to the ocean in hopeful search of the man we love. Nicely done!

[Lisasview]

Good morning Temperance,
Thank you for reading and reviewing my poem.
I appreciate your review...
Lisa, morning in Spain

[Ranger Kessel]

Paints a beautifully written landscape. Good read. Best wishes

[Lisasview]

Good morning Ranger,
Thank you for reading and reviewing my poem.
I appreciate it.
read moreGood morning Ranger,
Thank you for reading and reviewing my poem.
I appreciate it.
Lisa, in Spain

[Miss Sharon]

So beautifully written Lisa with such vivid imagery I could almost smell the lilacs! Sharon

[Lisasview]

Thank you so much Miss Sharon... I love lavender flowers.. Our garden is full of them..
Lisa, 6:30am in Spain

[Red Brick Keshner]

Hello, Lisa. This captures so much in the brevity of this poem. It also brings me to my places and enjoins my memories and hopes. I presume parts of our inner selves always feature in some way in our art and articulation. These join together in wonderful symmetry, from words to line, to images and inspiration. Thanks for sharing. Frederick.

[Lisasview]

I mush say dearest Frederick that your review is like a poem itself..full of appreciation..
I am delighted that you enjoy what i write.
Thank you!!
La, evening sun in Spain

[Patricia Wedel]

Deep breaths of Lavender fill the Air … as the Storm brings your Love to Harbor… a lovely poem touched by the Wind and fragrance of the Lavender Fields. Enchanting…. Pat

[Lisasview]

Good morning dear Pat,
Going through my poems to make sure I did not forget to say thank you to my reviews and came across your sweet review from 2 weeks ago.. Somehow I missed this one..sorry for that..
Thank you for always reading and reviewing my work,
Lisa, early morning in Spain

[Lisasview]

10 syllables per line and a simple rhyme make up this little poem of mine.

[Carola]

i'm not a romantic person, but i appreciate your poetic words of waiting for your love to safely return.
cheerio carola

[Lisasview]

Not sure when one says they are not romantic...interesting thought.. wondering what makes one romantic or not. Just thinking outloud..
Lisa

[Carola]

my not being romantic i mean i couldn't conjure up romantic words to write a love poem

[Lisasview]

Thank you
Lisa