Cry

Thanking Richard with his fabulous help. Rhyming Quatrains and Couplet in 10-count

Reviews

[Fabian G. Franklin]

The hurt here is palpable and leaves the reader wondering what the cause of the sustained anguish might be; the death of a spouse perhaps? We do ascertain that the relationship was sustained for " so many years" so naturally we deduce that the depth of feeling was mutual. But we are left with the sense that the object of pain and desire might be "back around" leading us to think of a broken relationship or a ghost perhaps. This was an intriguing write. Thank you for sharing.

[Lisasview]

Hi Fabian,
Thank you so much for taking the time to read and review my little poem... To be honest I have no idea where this poem came from... I got up one morning and felt a pressure to write it... Perhaps it is about my past loves and losses?? All within me...Sadly, I relate to my poem although now and for the past 40 years I have been in a relationship with no goodbyes... But before then I had so many almost long term loves..
Thank you for saying that this was an intriguing write... really means a lot to me. And, inspires me!
Lisa, finally on the computer after a long, long day day

[Betty Hermelee]

A heartfelt poem Lisa, a goodbye is always sad, even though it may be many years before. I love your imagery, soft and colorful....her heartache is lengthy, afraid to look our the window... memories slightly fading but sorrow still there" With no tears lets, scanning morning sky" As memories wither, the sun may bring out a smile.
Best, B

[Lisasview]

Wow, what a lovely review Betty...Thank you so very much.
I do appreciate it!!
Lisa, getting late in Spain

[Betty Hermelee]

You're very welcome Lisa!!! How's the weather there??? some friends going to southern Spain in September...HOT?
Best, B.

[Lisasview]

We are in Costa Blanca North...between Alicante and Valencia..so, one hour either way from where we live.
The weather is wonderful. In some ways like it is in Southern California where we are from..
Do you know where your friends are going?
Lisa

[Betty Hermelee]

I thin they are going south; Seville, etc...

[Lisasview]

Lovely area Seville...
L

[Betty Hermelee]

Thanks for info!

[Lisasview]

You are very welcome.

[Temperance]

Such a beautifully sad poem Lisa. I enjoyed reading it but, felt a familiar twinge of the same heartache. You are on my "favorite" list and, I love reading your work. Thank you for sharing this. Temp

[Lisasview]

Wow, wee Temp...on your favourites list... How wonderful.. Inspires me to write more.. I actually have 3 more poems I plan to Post...This poem came out of me all at once early one morning... I found the image, which I feels says so much...Thank you again for reading and reviewing...P.S. Have you read Go~Go Dancer,Doorways, or Time yet?
Lisa, late afternoon in Spain

[Temperance]

I’m not sure I have read those but will go Looking for them later. Temp

[Lisasview]

Thank you so much...

[SM]

I can't seem to stop reading your work !! This is beautifully written. You paint a beautiful picture with your words and invoke feelings of sorrow, longing, hopefulness, doom, heartbreak.... Super writing.

[Lisasview]

Wow SM, Yes, I see you have now read 3 of my poems...
And, I so appreciate it... I have quite a variety of poems... Sad, loving, sensual, etc. Some I wrote in the 70's when I was 22 years old.. Some are more recent... I only started posting my poems a few months ago for the first time.. Although I have been writing for a long time I never let anyone read my words..so this is a new adventure for me.
I write what I feel...
I recently wrote NYMPH, if you haven't already read it....
Lisa, moved from California to Spain a year or so ago

[SM]

I love reading your poems... For me they are super 'real' ... Please post more :) how do you feel about others reading your work now? I can understand why you didn't let anyone read them before.... ( very private.. they were just for you...? )

[Neville]

Very much enjoyed Lisa .. and even as I type I get that decidedly unique aftertaste of Richard that lingers on the palate like a fine old wine .. Yes indeed, very much enjoyed despite the obvious sadness (real or imagined) that inspired you to write on this occasion ......................Neville, still bloody munching apples :)

[Lisasview]

Hi Neville, with the apples...
Imagined, thank god...but I think all of us has that sadness in us somewhere..
Lisa, trying to be good and respond to all the reviews...

[Neville]

I like a woman who tries to be good .. the reviews are just the cherry on the cake ...

Neville being rude but blaming it on the bumpy ride :)

[Lisasview]

Hi Neville, reading the other reviews for a poem can be so wonderful.... The thoughts which often differ are great because they make us think.... Hope you got some decent food...
Lisa

[lightsong]

I don't know how I missed this old one, totally amazing dear Lisa, You've written many poems about heartbreaks and goodbyes, and I believe this to be of the bests of yours. So vivid, You made the reader feel it strongly. Superior.

Ghounwah, just finished working ~

[Lisasview]

Good morning Ghounwah,
Thank you so much for looking back at my work and finding Cry...and reviewing it... I also like this little poem... however, only 5 people have reviewed it...I wondered why 2 months ago... Maybe it is now too far down my list?
Anyway, thank you again!!
Lisa, early here in Spain

[Adelina Keith]

You were right. I really enjoyed this poem. It flows so nicely, and you can really feel the sadness in her heart as you read it.

[Lisasview]

Good morning Adelina,
I am going over my reviews and I see that I neglected to thank you for your very kind review...left a month ago!! I am so sorry for being late in saying thank you....
Lisa, early morning in Spain

[TamsinDaya]

Eish . . . this is so moving and beautiful. I love the rhyme scheme and sonnet format. And, the way you capture the emotions . . . very well done!

[Lisasview]

Good morning,
This is so strange because I clearly remember thanking you for reading and reviewing my poem... perhaps I forgot to post my comment...So I am sorry for being tardy in saying I so appreciate your lovely review Tamsin....
Lisa, now in Spain

[TamsinDaya]

Oh, please don't worry about the delayed response (and, you can see that my reply is delayed as well).

I hope that you're having lovely time. :)

[Lisasview]

You are most welcome.... If you are interested I think you might like Innocence, a very different type of poem I wrote with loads of metaphors..
Lisa, now in Spain

[Chris Shaw]

Good morning Lisa, I followed Gee here, so I'm pleased to leave a footprint on your page. Another well written piece from your pen and I note that Richard has assisted you in perfecting this one. Broken romances, break many a heart. My granddaughter is still nursing hers. Hope you had a great Easter break.

Have a lovely Tuesday.

Chris

[Lisasview]

So strange Chris that I neglected to thank you for your kind review...Posted two months ago!! Yikes... I was looking back at my reviews and I found three reviews for Cry that I neglected to respond to...Not sure what happened.. So please forgive my tardiness in responding. Thank you so much for taking the time to read and review my poems Chris...
Lisa, early in Spain..

[Chris Shaw]

No worries Lisa. Have a great Saturday:)

[Gee]

Good morning.
Surprised no reviews on this piece. As discussed in our chats this is so not my cup of tea but is very well written and will be relatable to those that have lost a lover and cling on to the faintest hope that they will have a change of heart.
Good morning, hope all is well in Spain Lisa.

[Lisasview]

Good morning my friend,
I did not realise that I had no reviews.. Perhaps the Title? I only had 11 people read this one..
Ah well, that is okay..
Another busy ahead of me...
Lisa, looks like thunder showers will be coming..

[Gee]

Sometimes poems get missed Lisa. If you go into " manage writing" and press the star in the feature column your poem will be presented again. Have you tried that ?

[Lisasview]

Hi there,
I see that you wrote this to me 2 months ago... At that point I did not really understand what you meant but after that I caught on and I have been doing that... So thank you so much...getting help is always wonderful.
Lisa, still in Spain..where for now there is less Covid...

[Gee]

Hi Lisa, I tested positive 3 days ago so am experiencing all that comes with it.
Hope you are both well

[Lisasview]

I am so so sorry to hear that... I had in last January and was down for about 8 days.. Mainly a bad headache..