Miles Apart

I wrote this poem when I was in my early 20's...In the 70's... Just a few things were changed, with the help of Richard. Rhyming Quatrains and Couplet

                

          Miles Apart....         

              Separated by miles 

              that keep us apart,

              my heart's

              still holding yours.

              Our love

              lingers-on,

              like the delicate web

              of an evil spider;

              the spider, but a toy 

              between us.

              Air hangs heavy

              between our hearts;

              still, longing for

              more time together.

              

              Yet,

              when I sit alone 

              thinking of you,

              your tenderness

              surrounds me 

                ... even now.

                    

                 ~~~

Reviews

[.]

The warmth and spirit of a loved one remains with us even after they are long departed. We may not feel their touch any longer but as long as they remain alive in our memory the miles seem just that bit closer. It's a sad piece with your loss, love and acceptance of it here for all to read. Touching poem, Lisa. ⚘

[Lisasview]

Good morning Jamila,
I wrote this about 30 years ago.. Interesting to read the reviews and what was thought about my poem.. Thank you so much for your insightful review.
Lisa

[Lisasview]

So weird because when I look at it on manage there are just two..
I will look again... Thank you so much.. Really appreciate it.
Lisa

[Lisasview]

Sorry I was responding to someone else about the spaces between the artwork and the Title and accidentally sent my messages to you!
Lisa

[M. J. Smith]

When someone has lit up our lives, we are so lost without them. Darkness surrounds us. But then, their memory, like a stray angel, guides us out. Beautiful words, Lisa.

[Lisasview]

Thank you so very much!! I really do appreciate your kind review.
Lisa

[M. J. Smith]

You are most welcome, Lisa.

[Coyote Poetry]

Dear Lisa. You made the words dance to perfect and wonderful meaning.
"The waters are blue and even green in parts,
the air hangs heavy there between our hearts."
I loved and I understood the above lines. Some places, some faces. Become a part of us forever. Thank you for sharing the amazing poetry and your thoughts.
Coyote

[Lisasview]

I can tell that you really read my poem..that you did not just skim over the words.. Thank you for your kind review!!

[Coyote Poetry]

I liked the use of the spiders, connecting places and memories. I enjoyed your work, and I will return later and read more. You are welcome, dear Lisa.

[Lisasview]

Thank you so much

[Ada]

A poem that speaks of love and separation knowing that the memories will be ours for the rest our lives. Nice write

[Lisasview]

Yes, and originally I called my poem death. I wrote it in the early 70's but it was for a very long time unfinished.. I added the last two lines and changed the title. Thank you,

[Sammi]

Hi again Lisa, I could not resist another read and review when i saw this one, it touched my heart in a special way from when my husband was in Afghanistan and we used to write back and forth before he was killed.
Especially your first couplet gripped my heart and verse two reminds me of the evil of the Taliban that kept us apart but verse three tugs deeply at my sadness as does your final couplet because there is nothing I love more than to close my eyes and remember our love for each other, thank you Lisa for this wonderful free verse poem -- you are so lovely a poet! :)

HUGGS!
Sammi

[ric d]

Beautiful, touching review.

So sorry for your loss.

[Lisasview]

Hi Sammie,
So strange that there is a comment on your review..but it is not from me? Can you see it on your end?? It is right above what I am writing now.. and has no name on it..weird..
Anyway, I am so glad you decided to read another one of mine. And, I am heartbroken that you lost your husband.. My poem was originally called Death when I had lost someone in the 70's. I have kept all my poems.. The only thing was that I changed the title and added the last two lines..I never changed anything else..The fact that it had such an affect on you is really wonderful. My hope is that my poems help someone feel....
Hugs back yo you my new friend,
Lisa

[ric d]

That comment was from Ric D.

Dont know why a name is not attached.

[ric d]

Just figured out that if you click the icon, the poster's name will show.

Again, a touching review by sammi.

[Lisasview]

Oh good.. Thanks Richard..

[Gee]

Do you ever wonder as to whether those from our past think of us as we do of them Lisa.
This is my favourite of yours thus far.
Good morning, hope you are well.

[Lisasview]

YES, I do!!! I think of all the people that have crossed my life over the years and wonder "do they ever think of me?" With Facebook I have been able to locate some people... but of course not everyone.. So happy you like my poem.. The response to it has been amazing.. This was an older poem of mine..that was unfinished. All I did was to add the final two lines... I like it as well. Thank you for your kind review. Lisa

[jacob erin-cilberto]

unfortunately, I can relate to this all too well. I have a couple people in mind...and often I sit alone
pondering what it would be like to have another moment with each. One a lover, one a closest friend.
Sometimes I just don't understand why some are picked to leave this world too soon.
Beautiful poem, Lisa.
j.

[Lisasview]

Hi Jacob, I really love that you relate to my poem as that is what I aspire to in my writing..although when I write I just write... My thoughts become poems.. Thank you so much for your review.

[ric d]

I like to think their thoughts are of us too, and that warms my heart.

Love is never separated between to hearts.

[Lisasview]

So so true.. I am so glad you got the meaning of my poem.

[Vertigo Cat1111]

The visuals in this are breathtaking. With you words you painted a million pictures and all of them are beautiful. Every line is so strong and though through what we’re reading is that two people miss each other dearly and yet there’s still some comfort and warmth. Thank you for sharing!

[Lisasview]

Hi there,
I am going back over every review for my poems just to make sure I did not forget to thank my reviewers and sure enough.. I found your wonderful review tucked in-between others... I am so sorry for being tardy in responding..
Your beautiful words regarding my poem were so kind..Saying that every line is so strong..You really got the essence of my poem...which is wonderful. I could not hope for more...Thank you ~ thank you..
Lisa, now in Spain

[Vertigo Cat1111]

It’s no problem at all! We all get busy of course, and it was my pleasure. (:

[Lisasview]

Thank you so much
Glad to know you are reading my work..
Lisa

[Carlos Lorenzo Estrada]

I like the metaphors used in this poem they are very striking. Even in death the memories of one's mate can elicit love's warmth in their heart. Wonderful work.

[Lisasview]

Hi Carlos, You really got what this poem that I wrote 40-50 years ago is about...The death of a loved one.. When I reread and submitted it yesterday I changed the title..Thank you