Miles Apart

I wrote this poem when I was in my early 20's...In the 70's... Just a few things were changed, with the help of Richard. Rhyming Quatrains and Couplet

                

          Miles Apart....         

              Separated by miles 

              that keep us apart,

              my heart's

              still holding yours.

              Our love

              lingers-on,

              like the delicate web

              of an evil spider;

              the spider, but a toy 

              between us.

              Air hangs heavy

              between our hearts;

              still, longing for

              more time together.

              

              Yet,

              when I sit alone 

              thinking of you,

              your tenderness

              surrounds me 

                ... even now.

                    

                 ~~~

Reviews

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The warmth and spirit of a loved one remains with us even after they are long departed. We may not feel their touch any longer but as long as they remain alive in our memory the miles seem just that bit closer. It's a sad piece with your loss, love and acceptance of it here for all to read. Touching poem, Lisa. ⚘

[Lisasview]

Good morning Jamila,
I wrote this about 30 years ago.. Interesting to read the reviews and what was thought about my poem.. Thank you so much for your insightful review.
Lisa

[Lisasview]

So weird because when I look at it on manage there are just two..
I will look again... Thank you so much.. Really appreciate it.
Lisa

[Lisasview]

Sorry I was responding to someone else about the spaces between the artwork and the Title and accidentally sent my messages to you!
Lisa

[emmajoygreen]

Somehow, a fine poet manages to find gentle words even when they come with sadness: the poem's visual of a woman sat, shoulder's slumped over her heart shows wretchedness and loneliness. That and twenty lines tears, start to finish, surely says more than shows. There's grief here.

[Lisasview]

Back to trying to write and going over each poem and making sure that i thanked everyone for their reviews... and here I found your wonder and thought ful review!!! Thank you so much,
Lisa

[Schatz]

"delicate web of an evil spider" Hmmm... How is the spider a toy? Also, curious about your choice to hyphenate lingers-on. I like it; just wondering what made you think to do it.

[Lisasview]

Hi there stranger,
I have been away from writing of such a long time... Had a full right knee replacement and I am just getting back to my old self. So now I am going back over each and every poem I have submitted on Writers Cafe and making sure that I have thanked all my reviewers. And... I found your questions and great review!!
Lisa

[Lisasview]

I also dropped Fan Story... that was a huge waste of time..

[Paris Hlad]

Thanks for inviting me to your site. I've now read a bunch of your poems, including the two you recommended. Glad I did because I always come away with a better attitude toward humanity when I read a poet who is educated, articulate, and believes that words should actually communicate thoughts and feelings - Ah, then (and even better), the lady has a gift for disciplined verse.

I especially liked the poem above, the "ruby-red" one, and the one about your father. Love & Death are the two great themes - And for me, they are almost always tied together.

Peace & Best Wishes
Eugene Osowski

[Lisasview]

Hi Eugene,
What an amazing review!
I so appreciate your words which inspire me even more to write.
I am quite new to posting so receiving such praise is wonderful.
Did you leave reviews for all the poems you read of mine?
It would be great if you would.
Another poem I think you might like is Innocence. This poem is filled with loads of metaphors and is quite different from any of my other poems.
I am going to send you a friend request.
Lisa, now in Spain

[SM Davis]

This has a nice rhythm and soft imagery. Nicely done.

[Lisasview]

Hi there,
How on earth did I forget to thank you for your very kind review... I so appreciate that you took the time to read and review... I recently posted a few more poems, etc.
Lisa, now in Spain

[Pete]

i was there with the author and felt everything. such sad feelings of lonely longing as they speak directly to the heart from the heart. amazing poetry at its finest. bravo ... :)

[Lisasview]

Hi Pete,
I was looking over all my poems to make sure I had thanked everyone...and, low and behold although I was sure I responded to to your wonderful review I do not see it!! Sometimes i respond on my phone and I do not see it on my IMAC... anyway, thank you so much for reading and reviewing.
I do appreciate it,
Lisa

[AYVID N]

Love lingers on...after separation by miles...
I loved the imagery in this poem.
Love can be like a spiderweb and yet its memories can be so softly tender and strong...
Such amazing poetry...

[Lisasview]

Good morning Divya,
Your lovely review gave me chills... Thank you so much for taking the time to read and review my poem... Did you know that I wrote this over 50 years ago...
Lisa, early morning in Spain

[AYVID N]

Such words retain their power always...
You are most welcome, dear Lisa.

[willweb]

This poem spoke to me as I know this feeling, the want and desire to be closer, to feel that person in your arms, to share breaths and not just a moon in the skies where we are. Poetry was a wonderful message board but the touch of her skin on mine was better than any poem. The miles did seem endless, though we did erase them a few times. I have written many poems on the theme of far apart. I loved this Lisa. It was beautiful.

[Lisasview]

Wow, I am delighted to see that you read the two poems I suggested... I write a rather varied selection of poetry... My most unusual and full of metaphors is Innocence.. You might like it. I will read yours soon.
Lisa

[Writergurl]

Yet,
when I sit alone
thinking of you,
your tenderness
surrounds me
... even now.

I really love your last stanza, This is emotional and so well written

[Lisasview]

Thank you so much for taking the time to review my work.
Lisa

[Levi Levin]

I enjoyed your poem as I have experienced this “miles apart” love. Maybe someday I will find it again. Great work!

[Lisasview]

Hi Levi,
Thank you for your review Levi.
You will find love again if you just keep your heart open.
Lisa, evening in Spain

[Levi Levin]

Thanks, I appreciate your kind words 😊

[Lisasview]

You are most welcome.