Screams

As I was organising my papers I came across several poems I wrote 50 years or so ago. Time changes us if we let it. Freestyle poetry

Screams....

The house is cold from screams;

the silence now but a whisper of tears.

A dark room, a closed door;

I feel the emptiness of being here before.

Again, alone I feel ...

searching open handed for life,

the draining of it already gone from my body.

Alone, I feel again upon returning,

my life an empty shell of dreams.

The house is cold from screams,

all but the one endless within me ...

Author's Note

Reviews are appreciated.
Thank you,
Lisa

Reviews

[Davidgeo]

Some people base their entire philosophy off of the concept that suffering is the natural state of existence. Not only is suffering to an extent inescapable, it is required, life is defined more than anything by it's presence or absence.
Everything as we know it is a distorted representation of some timeless amoral undefinable urge to exist. Humans cannot distinguish between invention and discovery when it comes to individual existence. I think you would be a fan of Arthur Schopenhauer's writing. (The World as Will and Representation)

[Lisasview]

Hi Little Tk,
Thank you for your review and the book to read...
You do know that I wrote this poem in the early 1970's..
Yes, on that day I was pretty upset...I say DAY because I was fine the nest day..and Yes, I agree
on the concept that one can not know happiness with out having known sadness..Did you ever read Gibran?
I haven't read his work for many years..but his thoughts have stayed with me..
Lisa, now in Spain..

[Davidgeo]

It's okay, the 1970's isn't far enough ago to make that review irrelevant.

It's strange how certain things we read decades ago still seem fresh. I find that when I review things I find out that I've sometime's romanticized them. Memory is a traitor.

[Davidgeo]

... Memory Can be a traitor I meant. Not every time.

[Chris Shaw]

Inner turmoil of a young you is what I experienced here as I read your poem Lisa, from way back in time. It made me feel lonely, isolated and misunderstood.

At a time when we have so much to look forward to in life, our emotions can often be a battlefield. Pleased you found this early write and posted it.

Have a happy Bank Holiday Monday.

Chris

[Lisasview]

Thank you so much for your review Chris,
I really appreciate it.
Lisa

[Gee]

This had a "tormented soul" feel about it, as if the writer is struggling with inner demons .Although only brief your words seem to linger.
Good morning and happy New year Lisa

[Lisasview]

Happy to you Gee,
This was written in 1971..
Glad I kept it as it shows how I was feeling way back when..
I appreciate your review..
Lisa

[Ada]

Nice write combing the ethereal with being solitaire; plus you ending ends up being stronger than what the rest of the poem had set the reader up for initially.

[Lisasview]

Dear Ada,
I am going over all my poems to make sure I thanked each person for their review and I found yours...written 10 months ago... I am so sorry for the delay in thank you you... Yours was a very special and kind review.
Lisa, still in Spain

[Betty Hermelee]

Well written poem, nice images of cold, ghostly and emptiness, which we all feel at times…… body is drained from sorrow; the house is empty from screams, except those within you.
Best, Betty

[Lisasview]

Wrote this way back when and glad I kept it. Shows where I was then and where I am now.
Really appreciate your review Betty..
Lisa

[Betty Hermelee]

You’re very welcome!

[M. J. Smith]

Should some places be revisited? Can we avoid them?
Some ghosts will haunt us for a lifetime.
Well written.

[Lisasview]

Hi there,
This is so strange... I am going back over all my poems to make sure that I have thanked each person that was kind enough to leave me a review and I came across your great review... which I was sure I had responded to 10 months ago!! Anyway, thank you so very much. I do appreciate that you took the time to review.
Lisa, still in Spain

[Julie McCarthy (juliesp..]

I immediately without reading the preceding review felt that it was from some turmoil or abuse or fighting in that place
Thanks great write ✍️

[Lisasview]

Hi Julie,
Going back over all my poems to make sure I thanked each reviewer that took the time to comment. I came across your great review and see that I neglected to say a huge thank you!!!
Lisa, still in Spain

[jacob erin-cilberto]

This could relate to lots of scenarios...but I feel abuse here...
the emptiness felt, the former screams, the love gone from the house as it grows cold.
and the speaker imprisoned in the memories that become that one endless scream within her.
Really powerful write, Lisa.
j.

[Lisasview]

I find it so interesting what your take on my poem is.
I wrote this in 1971 at the age of 23..where I lived in the Hollywood Hills.. visiting my mother in the house I grew up in...luckily no abuse..
and luckily the endless scream within me stopped...
I appreciate that you actually take the time to read each and every word..I appreciate your comments. Thank you

[Writergurl]

Wow, this is nicely written and has feelings to it. I can feel this write

[Lisasview]

Thank you so much for the kind review. I am new to submitting my poems so having you sa you can feel the write means a lot to me. Did you happen to read the first two I submitted?

[Writergurl]

not yet, i am still getting adjusted and getting reconnected to this site, it has been a while for me on here.

[Lisasview]

Okay..no worries..Merry Christmas!!

[Unspoken poet]

such an emotional read, this tugs. well written emotional write

[Lisasview]

Thank you and Merry Christmas from beautiful, inspiring Spain.
I was in my 20's when I wrote this.. I was at my mothers house..then in 2007 around the time my mother past I wrote Hand and Hand.. quite a contrast. So glad I kept all the poetry I have ever written..
I am going to read your poems this morning..