Screams

As I was organising my papers I came across several poems I wrote 50 years or so ago. Time changes us if we let it. Freestyle poetry

Screams....

The house is cold from screams;

the silence now but a whisper of tears.

A dark room, a closed door;

I feel the emptiness of being here before.

Again, alone I feel ...

searching open handed for life,

the draining of it already gone from my body.

Alone, I feel again upon returning,

my life an empty shell of dreams.

The house is cold from screams,

all but the one endless within me ...

Author's Note

Reviews are appreciated.
Thank you,
Lisa

Reviews

[Davidgeo]

Some people base their entire philosophy off of the concept that suffering is the natural state of existence. Not only is suffering to an extent inescapable, it is required, life is defined more than anything by it's presence or absence.
Everything as we know it is a distorted representation of some timeless amoral undefinable urge to exist. Humans cannot distinguish between invention and discovery when it comes to individual existence. I think you would be a fan of Arthur Schopenhauer's writing. (The World as Will and Representation)

[Lisasview]

Hi Little Tk,
Thank you for your review and the book to read...
You do know that I wrote this poem in the early 1970's..
Yes, on that day I was pretty upset...I say DAY because I was fine the nest day..and Yes, I agree
on the concept that one can not know happiness with out having known sadness..Did you ever read Gibran?
I haven't read his work for many years..but his thoughts have stayed with me..
Lisa, now in Spain..

[Davidgeo]

It's okay, the 1970's isn't far enough ago to make that review irrelevant.

It's strange how certain things we read decades ago still seem fresh. I find that when I review things I find out that I've sometime's romanticized them. Memory is a traitor.

[Davidgeo]

... Memory Can be a traitor I meant. Not every time.

[.]

Silent screams within the home.....it speaks to me of restlessness and some frustration with the situation. Quite often there is not much life to be found in cold, barren places and when we find ourselves stuck in such an environment, its no wonder we despair about our circumstances. Your choice of Munch's "The Scream" is a very appropriate piece of artwork and complements the words written. A haunting piece of inner turmoil, dear Lisa. ⚘

[Lisasview]

Sorry, I just saw your wonderful review of my Screams..
Thank you so much for the review.
read moreSorry, I just saw your wonderful review of my Screams..
Thank you so much for the review.
I feel that my choice art work really represents the way I felt way back when..As an artist I am very conscious of the art I choose for each of my poems..
Your review hit the nail on the head..as they say.
Thank you again,
Lisa

[Cyprian Van Dyke]

Whoa, I very much enjoy reading a poem that is 50 years old. Interesting thing, people feel this same way today and will 50 years from now probably. Your poetry is timeless. Tyfs

[Lisasview]

Thank you so much for your kind review. I wrote so many poems over the years. Such fun to read them now. I have changes quite a bit in the way I feel about life. If you have a chance perhaps you can read my other two poems. I have just finished rewriting some of my Sonnet..Hand in Hand and will submit it this morning (morning in Spain)

[Kim S.]

this is so good i like the feel and emotions in this write

[Lisasview]

Thank you so much.. Hard to believe I wrote this in 1971 when I was 23 years old..

[Lisasview]

When I reread it it brings back the way I felt then.
Thank you for your review Beckie.

[Julie McCarthy (juliesp..]

AMAzing poem
Great write

[Lisasview]

Thank you so much..Wow the word Amazing.how kind.

[Patricia]

First of all let me say how sorry I am you are having trouble posting, it can be so aggravating, it’s happened to me a couple times but I easily got them in on a second and third time so I’m stumped as to why you are having trouble.

As for the poem, yes, love it! I love the dark poems and the feel in this is so familiar, that haunting silence except the echoes between the ears, even for one hour is bad enough but a night full is maddening and then comes dawn and they are over powered by the daily hustle, then end of the day rinse and repeat. But really good poetry comes out of the dark.

[Lisasview]

Thank you Patricia..
This was written in 1971 when I was about 23 years old..
I do not have that Scream in me anymore..Thank god!!
I have tried for 4 days and at least 25 times to submit another poem..
Did you have time to read the ones I wrote in 2000..quite a change..
Lisa

[light and ashes]

WOW, haunting to say the least. That last line.......

[Lisasview]

Thank you so much for your review.. I know you wrote it three weeks ago..but I only just saw it..read moreThank you so much for your review.. I know you wrote it three weeks ago..but I only just saw it..
Lisa

[sonnie ibadah]

I love the gloomy hollow feeling of this. Nice work!

[Lisasview]

Oh gosh, I am so sorry for my tardy response to your insightful review...I had just joined Writers Cafe and crazy adding poems and reviewing that I somehow missed your review.
Thank you
Lisa, now in Spain

[Chris]

Seems we can never go 'home' especially when it never really WAS the home we wished so hard for...

You paused... I paused because I wanted to 'taste' the person you are ...a 'good' one, a real one. And THAT matters.

[Lisasview]

Hi Chris, I really thought I had responded to you insightful review of my poem.
Thank you so much for taking the time to read my poems.. I appreciate when you say.. You Paused... I paused.. Fabulous Chris..
Lisa

[Chris]

See, I had read "Screams" all on my own. Some minds are so very ...fragile... against all appearance otherwise and some have rooms "inside" framed in tungsten steel... sigh.

Screams - pain, anger, frustration, overwhelming moments, births, deaths, extremes... and silence.

[Katarzyna Anna Koziorow..]

I like the atmosphere of your poem. It's sad and gloomy, but I like that kind of poetry. I will be happy to visit you. Best wishes!

[Lisasview]

Thank you for your review. I wrote this in 1971..
I was in my 20's and boy has my life changed.. Yes, please visit me.
Lisa

[Fabian G. Franklin]

This is a chilling recognition of Deja Vu. I reminded of a favorite quote: "If you have built castles in the air, your work need not be lost; that is where they should be. Now put foundations under them.” –Henry David Thoreau. I'm certain the years of my life have been spent laying one brick at a time. I greatly enjoyed the read. F.

[Lisasview]

Hi there Fabian,
I really enjoy reading you great reviews.. I actually read your reviews on other poets writing (the ones I am already looking at of course) Yes, my life has been spent laying one brick at a time and although difficult at times I have enjoyed most of it..
Your connection with what I write is amazing..
Lisa