-When I see you-

When I see you,

My heart starts racing,

As if it wants to jump out of my chest.

 

When I see you,

My eyes never blink,

They stay the way they are.

 

When I see you,

I think of how lucky I am,

To have the most prefect guy.

 

When I see you,

Nothing else is around,

It's just us, on the Earth's ground.

 

When I see you,

I know that our love is true,

Because baby,

When I see you,

My heart is complete.

Reviews

[Mike Espinosa]

This is an interesting poem. You did will with the stanzas, and your emotion is good.

My only suggestion is to change "My eyes never blink," to "My eyes don't blink," simply because the former says that you never blink ever, including when he's not around. It makes the statement flat and trivial.

Other than that, this is a good poem. Good job.

[~ Otto Girl ~]

Very cute hun.

[Justin Street]

I was told something similar once.....but that was a long time ago
I'm glad you express your feelings so well
he is very lucky=) -Justin

[Laura Yida <3]

this is adorable! i love it!