Lying With You

Lying With You

A Poem by *Always be Me:)*

While I lay here

On this bed

I think of how wonderful

And perfect it is

To be lying next to you.

I love you dearly

My wonderful fiancé

The way you look at me

The way you love me

The way you care

It’s all so prefect

When I am Lying with You

© 2010 *Always be Me:)*


Author's Note

*Always be Me:)*
I hope you like this, I love it! :D

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what a soft heart you are.......this is really nice...

Posted 14 Years Ago


LOVE THIS! I know the awesome feeling :)

Posted 14 Years Ago


This is a cute poem. Your emotions come through well.

I don't have many suggestions for this one, but you need to get rid of the 1 period you used, for uniformity's sake.

The second to last line, "It’s all so prefect" can be shortened to "So perfect." Just a concision thing.

Overall, great poem. Good job.

Posted 14 Years Ago


This is so sweet!! :D

Posted 14 Years Ago


this is the place that we all hope to land in one day my poet

Posted 14 Years Ago


this is adorable!

Posted 14 Years Ago


It's so sweet and simple, but at the same time, it's amazing. Good job!

Posted 14 Years Ago


This is sweet. Good job. :)

Posted 14 Years Ago


I really like your simplicity, Michaela... This poem is very direct but at the same time, your ardent love for your fiance shines through. Keep writing!

Posted 14 Years Ago


Yes we need to stop the perfect moments and make them stand still. A beautiful poem. Your words are wise and sweet. Most people learn too late they had paradise and allow it to escape. A excellent poem
Coyote

Posted 14 Years Ago



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Added on May 25, 2010
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Hello, my name is Michaela. I am 28 yrs old and single! I have brown hair and dark greenish blue eyes. I graduated last year....amazing feelings :). I'm 5'3" and I weigh about 140lbs. I love to hang o.. more..

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