Fighting for my Life

Here in this world

We fight for our lives.

Sometimes we fight for others.

"Everything will be ok"

That's what we always hear.

But are we sure

Sure that everything will be ok?

No not always my friend

You have to fight for what you want

Even if you don't want to.

Here we are in this world

Fighting for our Lives.

Reviews

[aftervision]

so true we have to fight my poet for what is right my poet

[A.Lee]

This is very good. I'm enjoying watching the way your poetry is developing. You've come a long way. Well said.

[Coyote Poetry]

World ain't so easy now. Good things take hard work and some luck. I like this poem. I hope we learn to fight together. Will take the whole USA to create change. Ain't no race in being jobless and hungry. A excellent poem.

[zappy]

this is very true the is really nice

[deeps]

This is a truthful write as well.
Very well stated.

[Mike Espinosa]

This is an interesting poem. I like your conservation of punctuation in this, but I think you might have been a little too conservative. Your emotion is very sincere and comes across well.

My only suggestions are to revise your punctuation and to decapitalize "Lives" at the end. If you're trying to make it a character, through personification, it kind of works, but I don't think it's very pertinent to the poem. Overall, this is a good write. Great job.