Dancing

Walking down the middle

Bradley and I dance to the song

Grind on me

Everyone joins in and dances

Kissing my neck and holding me close

So very hot and kinky

Everyone scatters as the song

Walk it out starts pumpin

While Bradley walks it out

I start gettin low with my girls

So much dancing is so much fun

Slow song comes on

Oh no where is Bradley?

Standing right behind me

"Baby, care to dance?"

Smile on my face

He holds me close

While we dance to our song

Wait for me, by Theory of a Deadman

Dancing with my U.S. Marine

Dancing is one thing that will...

Never be forgotten

Reviews

[kypruss]

Really nice and creative, keep writing and also visit my page when your free.

[Coyote Poetry]

A very good poem. Need to celebrate being alive. Spend some good time with your Marine. He will need the good memories when he is far from you. A excellent poem of love and good music.
Coyote

[Alysha]

Yes, it capture the primal instints of lust and yet it also gives us the true feeling of love. Well done, very well done. I too have a marine husband and they are the best. Keep Writing.

[zappy]

this is well written i like it

[deeps]

This is so lovely I enjoyed this write, very well written

[Mike Espinosa]

This is a cute poem. Your sentiments are touching, and you describe them well.

However, the lack of punctuation in this makes some things confusing. like "Everyone joins in and dances / Kissing my neck and holding me close" This implies that everyone was kissing your neck and holding you close, but I don' think that's what you were going for.

Also, "Grind on me" and "Wait for me" are both song titles, I'm assuming. If that is so, I think you need to capitalize the titles accordingly, and maybe put them in italics or quotes, it depends on your preferences. In some way, you need to acknowledge what is part of the title and what isn't. These cases are pretty easy to figure out, but in some contexts it can get confusing.

Overall, this is a good poem. Just some stylistic problems from my end. Nicely done.

[Paul Okeke]

oohh niceone..come dance with me also..a love entertaining poem

[Ruth]

Lovely imagery again, nicely concise! xx

[A.Lee]

This is really good :) I can see your poetry improving. Nice song refrences. Well done.

[Sarah]

i love that song. i also love all or nothing lol