Pressure

You look around and see other kids,

Smoking pot, or drinking alcohol.

You think ‘hey I wonder what that tastes like’,

You start thinking you’ll try it.

Don’t do it!

It’s not as fun as it looks!

It messes up your life!

God put it on this earth, yes,

But it doesn’t mean,

That he wanted you to do it.

It’ll mess up your life!

Careful,

Don’t fall into pressure.

Reviews

[~ Otto Girl ~]

very true i have seen it happen when your friend dyes of a over dose or alchol posioning. God put it on our earth to put us through a test so he can chanllege us and teach us a lesson but i dont think i was going to be this hard. Keep up your wrting they have alot of emtion.

[aftervision]

falling under pressure will lower your body into the ground my poet -- i like that you are looking out for more than yourself

[Allison]

This is so true! I totally agree with you.

[Taylor H.]

This is true....but it doesnt really sound like a poem. It sounds like your just ranting about something. Try to make this flow more...like a peice of art...not just a rant about what you think we should do. The message is good, but the presentation isnt...

[a_mystery]

Great job..!!
loved the flow of poem..
it puts up the issue most tennagers face..

[An owl on the moon]

Pressure comes to us in different forms at all times of our life. You give a powerful warning that not everything that seems good or exciting will be good for us in the end. So much can lead to destroying hope and dreams. Excellent write.

[kypruss]

alot of emotions grouped togather which equals = great+amazing = fantastic

[Coyote Poetry]

Take strength and wisdom to stay away from the bad things. Funny part the drugs are a weakness when needed. I lost four brothers to drugs. Easy to fall and depend on the devil for safety. The drugs make you weak and not able to face life. A very good positive poem on living a good life.
Coyote

[Chassitie Linnaea Nicol..]

love it

[zappy]

wow very true i know wat u mean

[deeps]

SO very true, well stated