When You Kiss Me

When you kiss me,

I feel a sudden rush,

That grows through my body,

And makes me grow weak.

When you kiss me,

The way you hold me,

Makes me feel so warm,

It makes my heart grow more and more.

When you kiss me,

I know our love is meant to be,

I feel it in the tingle,

That your lips give me.

Reviews

[Jen]

I like this...I like the descriptions you use

[deeps]

Ah! this is so amazingly sweet. Such a wonderful write.

[Chassitie Linnaea Nicol..]

love it

[Michael X]

wow, formulated, this is romantic, lighthearted and full of wistful longing,
you have an awsome way with style and form that create a great flow,
excellent job Michaela, keep it up.

[Mike Espinosa]

I like your repetition of the first line near the end. It makes the feelings come full circle. Your language is very suiting for the character of the poem and gives the poem's meaning more clarity. Again, my only criticism is stylistic, commas. You are a great writer though, especially if punctuation is the only problem I ever have on your pieces.

[A.Lee]

I like this one. Nicely written. Cute and romantic, yet serious and sensual.

[Angelwithabeard]

way cute and "awwwww" ing. it shows alot. way cool^^

[The Analog Kid]

Sweet.

[Sarah]

awe :) this makes me think of my boyfriend lol!!!!!!!

[~ Otto Girl ~]

Very pretty peice hun.