When You Kiss Me

When you kiss me,

I feel a sudden rush,

That grows through my body,

And makes me grow weak.

When you kiss me,

The way you hold me,

Makes me feel so warm,

It makes my heart grow more and more.

When you kiss me,

I know our love is meant to be,

I feel it in the tingle,

That your lips give me.

Reviews

[aftervision]

that is one hell of a kiss my poet -- one hell of a kiss

[Allison]

This is great! it's really romantic, and passionate. Great job!

[clauds294]

Aww this is soo adorable!! I loved it sooo much! and i can really relate! wow! Awesome Write!! :D

[C.J.G.]

This is very nicely written! I love the sentiment and the entire emotion of the poem.

One thing that stuck out to me is your phrase, "makes me grow weak". To grow weak? That is interesting, the contrast. Because usually when you grow, you grow stronger, not weaker. Maybe you want to say "weaker"? I'm not sure.

Either way, great job! You capture it beautifully.

[Taylor H.]

I know exactly the feeling your talking about. I love him so much...Great job

[Ruth]

Devotion has no bounds, a lovely poem honxx

[Coyote Poetry]

When it is good. We are in trouble. A very good poem. The description was kind and the emotion was of happiness. A excellent poem.
Coyote

[kypruss]

i can feel it while am reading it!!!! good job, keep writing

[Noelle Pierce]

Sweet!

[Laura Yida <3]

awwwww! this is super cute! i absolutely love it!!! and i know the feeling! lol