Silent

This is the original version of "Sitting in Silence". I was able to restore this one with all the original reviews...YEAH!!!!

I sit in silent contemplation.

A million thoughts, images careening

through my mind.

Some stop, hover for a moment

and forgotten pain sets in.

 

I sit in silent contempt

hating all I see, all I am.

Watching hopelessly as life goes on

around me, without me.

 

I sit in silent agony.

Helpless while these tears fall, stream,

pooling at my feet,

drenching my soul.

 

I sit in silent fear

dreading who I am, what I have become.

Letting my life sprial out of control.

 

 I sit in utter agony

waiting for you to lend for you

but you just look the other way

and I sit, silent, watching as you walk away.

Author's Note

people really seemed to like this poem as it was, so I thought I'd repost it, in it's original form.

Reviews

[Adrian K. Smith]

I think it might just be that I am very tired, have popped a blister on my little toe for the third time, and that I am just very tired... yeah, that's the ticket.

I admit that I clicked on this because of the image of the tree.
I admit that as I read through it, I did so with a bit of cold disdain. You can only feel bleak for so long before you kind of start feeling bleak to everything.

Well, then I hit the last pair of lines. My nose twitched a bit. My throat got a little dry. I felt the sucking of my sinuses way back in. My left eye quivered a bit. I tasted salt...

You threw us down the stairs. You calmly walked down after us. Then you kicked us in the gut.

Very nicely done.

[Hitman "The Clean..]

How many times have I just wanted to find a silence in a place such as that picture. This poem is the perfect example of such a place. A place where alot of people would like to go to where there are no problems, a place where one can think without all of the stresses and noise of life. Nicely done!

[Celtic Cat]

First of all.....beautiful picture. I can sit in that all day....I love trees. Now...onto the piece!

WOAH. Very hard hitting piece. This is as raw as they come, in my book. I love the way you write about this topic, very original. It's a haunting piece that is staying with me more and more after each read. A little close to home, though not today, but many yesterdays. I love this piece; in fact, I'm faving it. Great work!!! Glad you unburied it from the crash - well worth the dig. ; )

[Amplexus Dryke]

I could have written this. Did you steal it from my mind? LOL
I love this. It's going to my favorites.
It reminds me of bipolar or depressive thought patterns.
Like when you are trying to sleep and this is what you get

I sit in silent contemplation.
A million thoughts, images careening
through my mind.
Some stop, hover for a moment
and forgotten pain sets in.

Awesome!

[Steven Silvey]

Pretty good. My favorite lines...

I sit in silent contemplation.
A million thoughts, images careening
through my mind.
Some stop, hover for a moment
and forgotten pain sets in.

Good job.

[Snickerdoodle!!!]

wow! this is a powerful poem. i love that it makes me feel the pain and hatred. greatly composed and beautifully expressed! i love it!!!!

[Michael Bauer]

very much like Rachmaninov, say, piano musics? the line lengths are just right and they spin me back into the next line. this seems very poetic to me.

[Tyler W. R. Hunt]

I love this poem it made me pause a moment and think of what I once was.

[Ed Rector]

I sit in silent contempt.
Hating all I see, all I am.

i love that part.... i enjoyed this poem much more then the other one i reviewd.good job

[Maria Retz]

Oh, I hope your life is more light than your poems.

You write such sad poems...

But they are all of them brilliant, so touching, so deep.

This poem is too.

I find you an amazing writer and I am looking forward to read and read your work.

Thank you so much for sharing your work and showing your talent.

I hope you will become published one day