create this world

lets sit in the sun and glow thru glass

lets reflect off the walls and find the past

lets hold our hearts and make a mask

lets break

lets break

we can follow our feelings then tumble down

we can create a feeling thru the ground

we can bend the rules to find the sound

we can shake

we can shake

start to see the holy ghost

start to find when we need him most

start this life so we can fill the blanks

start to make

start to make 

create this feeling to love again

create this heart to find a friend

create this time to set the spin

create this world

create this world

Reviews

[Laha]

i like where you are going with this piece. I enjoyed the first stanza when you are taking action to "create this world"..."lets sit", "lets reflect", "lets hold". I wish this would continue through. For instance, in the second stanza "we can follow"..."can" is probably unnecessary. I think "we follow our feelings" hold the same meaning and flows nicely. Just a thought. Thanks for the request!
~L

[clauds294]

This I loved so much!! :) Wonderful

[Kate Hunter]

I agree with Angelina. I could almost hear it as a song in my mind.

[Sarah Jane]

Intruiging definetly. I like how "WE" create te world. We made it how it is. I love how each stanze begins with the same word, it rhymes beautifully, and I always read poetry outloud to feel the flow ans yours was perfect. Good work.

[SpokenWord]

Create the world. We are the ones who create the world we live in. and I agree this would be a cool song. Good write~

[Im His Daughter]

Interesting.. Very Interesting.. great job here!

[HopelesslyDevoted]

this would make a really cool song!