The Light of a Thousand Sunsets

The first chapter to the book Just Another Day

Here I was, lying on the prickly yellow sand of the once crowded beach. It was around late-noon and the sun was just setting below the horizon. In the pale blue sky I could see the beautiful colours of the sunset. But this sunset was different, it was like a thousnad suns rolled into one, creating such an aura that it was nearlly unimaginable. The light, the contrast, the spectacular colours, they all looked like streaks of soft, warm colours diving into the ocean millions of kilometres away.

 

I slowly rose up onto my feet. They were a bit wobbly at first from sitting down for so long, but I gradually got used to it as I started to walk back along the silent beach. I was just making my way up to the little beach cabin that I was staying in when I saw something shimmering in the sand about 10 metres infront of me. I impatiently hurried over to the shimmer in sand as it was growing cold out and a chilling breeze was starting to form. As I reached the glimmer I found out it was an old rusted locket in the shape of a starfish. What a pretty locket I thought to myself. I carefully picked up the silver necklace and washed it off with some sea water. I once again made my way up to the beach house, trying my best to scratch away all the rust that had formered on the locket's surface.

 

I opened the creaking door of the old beach cabin and switched on the pale light to brighten up the room. I gently placed the locket on the kitchen bench and made my way to my shabby room. Lyed down on my bed and slowly sank into a deep sleep without another single thought.

Reviews

[Shep]

Good first chapter. Like the detail. It seems believable and that's what counts.

[Carnation]

Thanks!

[Marc Marlon Villaflor]

Love the story and I am jealous with this person as she sleep easily :), I think it would be great if she spent some little time checking the starfish locket before sleep.

[Carnation]

its called tension. i did that on purpose so you would keep reading ( ;

[InsanityWriter]

Interesting. :) Your writing style is good, all I'd change is the timing of the happening around "mid-noon". The sun doesn't set then. :P Check it over for any grammatical errors too. ^_^ Nicely done! I look forward to seeing where this is going... (;

[Carnation]

sorry about the mid noon thing. Just where I am it's winter and the sun sets super early then.

[InsanityWriter]

Oh! That makes more sense. ;) Just try to clarify that then. ^_^

[Carnation]

Thanks for the thumbs up Last Future. I'm happy that you enjoyed it!

[Harriet Styles]

You are soooo good!! Can't wait for you to upload more ;)

[∠( ᐛ 」..]

Really good chapter. The person's point of view is good, and also imaginable. Tho there are a few grammar errors and typos.
Anyways, good job.
100/100