Sorrow is my Friend

Will my sorrow ever go away?
Or here in my heart will it stay?
Will the pain inside come alive?
Taking me as its host only to strive,

I'm broken in two,
And I don't have a clue what to do,
My small world is tearing down,
Falling pieces one by one on the ground,

There seem to be no way to escape,
The pain that follows me everyday,
Taunting, preying on my pride,
Hoping to take over while am still alive,

I cant help to feel this way,
Loneliness is here some way,
But you my friend, you can help,
Just be my friend and it will all end.

Author's Note

Have you ever felt like no one cares for you anymore or depression just sink it

Reviews

[Tai Ryens]

You have lots of potential as a poet. In my opinion, this piece went through smoothly without a problem but the last stanza made my grasp on the emotions of this poem slip. Particularly the last two lines, it seems to stand out. It would be better without the last stanza.
Other than that, you could make some improvements here and there.
Keep writing and honing your skills with a pencil, well done.

[Cherry Lai^_^♥~~]

Very true...

[Btwixer]

I know these feelings alot. Nicely expressed