MOONSHINE WOOD

To an actual place of my acquaintance in Hertfordshire, England, on the edge of the Chiltern hills, some 30 miles north of London.

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Deep dwelling on you draws me out

To be with you dilutes dark doubt

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I walk down bridalways alone

To be with you breaks heart of stone

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I see you on the hill ahead

To be with you mind's eye to thread

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I feel your ancient branch and bough

To be with you outside the now

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I know you are full there for me

To be with you in root of tree

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I am made right in your insight

To be with you seeds slow delight

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I am a bluebell in your spring

To be with you in truth to ring

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I am at one among your oak

To be with you and ancient folk

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I now become myself again

To be with you in Nature sane

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Author's Note

I will get a pic of said wood next time I go there.

Reviews

[w2de35657u687y4324rf]

There's definitely a very vivid sense of life hand-in-hand with the visual elements. I appreciate the power you invest in a place of thought and being, which kind of goes back to ideas on elements of nature and such having drive on human conscience.
I would hypothesize that you, as an individual, have an especially acute awareness of the natural world, such as is given in your novel and the like. The perceptions and diction wrought in with the description are gracious.
My favorite line was "I am a bluebell in your spring/To be with you in truth to ring" as I believe that it delivers both a play on words (bluebell), but also gives a kind of purpose with the speaker, who says that he shall ring in truth, thus giving us this message of nature and beauty. And the image about the set wood having a particular spring of its own is just wondrously poetic.
Bravo.

[Lily Mae]

I enjoy the strength in the beginning of each line stating the "I am" .."I know".. and yet the strength softens into beauty.. To become one with some in nature sane..is a true treasure...x

[emmajoy]

Your poetry has a music of its own, there's always that unique style, phrases set in a specific light or dark depending on your theme. There are almost too many choice phrases or couplets, but perhaps, just perhaps this stands out for me:
' I am made right in your insight ~ To be with you seeds slow delight'

Re-reading, this could be two poems in one, part nature, part love .. whether or not, is beautiful.

[Michael X]

epic work Orlando, from the title to the ending, to be with the essense
of nature, from muse to sorrow to joy, fully captivating!

[Ken Simm.]

I like the intentional misspelling of bridalways for obvious reasons. This is personally quite brilliant.

[Cherrie Palmer]

How simple and poetic are the ties that bind one to another both in memory and in their restful place. Nature brings those feelings to life but you have put it to pen

[J. J. Nightingale]

WOW !! .. THIS IS ONE OF YOUR BEST ! .. I AGREE WITH ROXI "AWESOME" !! AS I READ, I AM THERE .. .. A MOST WONDERFUL DESCRIPTIVE VERSE !! ..

EXCELLENT .. JASMINE

[closed..acct]

Oh Wow, This is awesome, I love this piece it's so poetic.