RISING RAIN

A mad conceit. At first I thought it was about someone else, thought twice about bothering to post it. But then I realised it applied to me the more so. I bows to you.

Up from the ground, up-rising rain

Up-streaking-up before your eyes

You watch a puddle vanish rise

Up-streaking-up, into the clouds

Your sanity divesting shrouds

In rising rain you're made insane

Up from the ground, up-rising rain

Your talent's deeply shallow vain

A thing reversing into clouds

In sheets of thin prosaic shrouds

You blindly see your river rise

Your vaunting vanity up flies

Up from the ground, up-rising rain

Up-streaming-up in failure's pain

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Reviews

[joshua deathdealer]

I love the reverse imagery. Thought provoking and original. Excellent work.

[emmajoy]

A change of intention, direction; this appears to be an analysis of character within situation, but is coloured with condemnation, i think. Admittedly, 'don't always understand how other people's work - perhaps you do and too well. Your style of writing is unique .. you turn thoughts upside down, inside out.

[Gobinder Singh Dhindsa]

Really Lovely writing!
I like whole wording.
Keep it up!
Do you read mine too Anguish and She..
God bless you..
Lucky!

[NoneOfYourBusiness akaK..]

the reversi effect is stunning~ panes of pain ignite in direct opposition to the emotional clairvoyant nuances~

[Muse]

Rising like a Phoenix! You put on reverse what is often cliche. It's not the falling rain that inspires you. It's the drive to rise against everything that pushes down on you. Favorited.

[Ladysue]

this was intriguing to read..up-rising rain...what a way to express..unique and engaging.. great beat too...

[Tai Chi Italy Take Two]

PS! I think UPrising Reign would work too. x

[Tai Chi Italy Take Two]

It has a pounding and persistent rhyme that suits the topic beautifully. We all suffer a constant inner struggle to gain success in our own eyes view. I would say that success shows in the love from others eyes.

Smiling at you

Tai x

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So wonderful and lovely!