LEARNING TO SWIM

Re-post. Confidence is all.

Take my hand

Take it

Feel my sureness

My abosolute sureness

In the buoyancy of your beauty

The perfet buoyance

Of your perfect beauty

 

Come

Be sure

Write

I've felt your beauty in your words

Slim words

Lithe words

Raven-haired words

Smiling words

Strong words

Soul sure, soul words

 

Come

Be sure

See!

You're floating without even knowing

Such is your beauty

Effortless beauty

Natural beauty

Buoyant beauty

 

Come

Swim to me

The stroke is life

The sea is deepest love

Take my hand

Take it

Feel my sureness

My absolute sureness

 

Reviews

[Bear]

the title is what caught my attention for I'm told that when I first got in the pool to learn how to swim I was so scared all I could do was cry. Little did I know but, quickly discovered that the water was my friend and that I was unsinkably bouyant.

"Take my hand" what a statement; one that we say to others at times but, they miss the offer and dash the chance of sharing the love we offer from deep within. A loss for both perhaps but, then again offered it was they denied and missed their chance. Oh, this is a fine write!! Thanks for sharing it and bringing it to my attention!! Sallie Bear

[justjenn_2u]

The form of this poem is immaculate.

The symbolism of writing as to swimming, amazing!

You did an awesome job here.

[JP thinks the WC is apt..]

A belated thanks for reading my short story - much appreciated. I see that you work in news media - I'm an ex-hack myself, now in PR, minus one soul.

I very much enjoyed this, it's lyrical and has a lovely symmetry to it. It's an effervescent piece, delicate and romantic. Difficult to write a piece such as this without steeping it in honey. I laso liked the 'words' metaphors in the second stanza.

[Emily B]

ohhh, I want to. I really do. But the water is deep.

I love these words.

[Chloe..Across the Unive..]

This is such a great poem i loved it a.. love the delicacy and the metaphors are wonderful.. best poem i have read today..

Chloe
xoxo

[FoolsGold23]

this was just plain touching my friend, "Confidence is all" I say, I'm not one much for swimming, but if it's anything like getting onto a ballroom dance floor, I can see the aid of a strong, reassuring hand in the tempestuous moments of beginning. I really enjoyed reading this one, it's so relaxing, and yet, strengthening in an unobtrusive way too! Beyootiful!!~P

[*** Hey Jude***]

The metaphors you bring to this piece cause such a gentle flow, and effortlessly draw me to each line. I think using water, as a description of trust is so meaningful as water can be a blessing or a curse. These sentiments here are just so beautifully expressed and the last stanza warmed the heart. Your right, it's all about confidence ;-). ~ Jude

[Gary H]

'tis a great poem, one in which I have used the same title and written along the same lines for the future. Nats has said she would teach me one day as she used to be a lifeguard. as she is far away I guess this is something not going to happen soon however, I will do this. not an excuse to see her in a bathing costume either!!

[CLUTZ]

prettiful. i know that's not a word, but it describes what i mean. i like it. i have no confidence, and am not sure of myself, have never been. i hope whatever your friend went through at that time she is better now and will get her confidence back.