THE RAPIER

15 syllables in the blade, 14 in the hilt ... making the balance point the letter N where the two join.

 

 

A

B

L

A

D

E

M

A

D

E

T

O

F

I

G

H

T

I

N

T

H

E

W

A

R

S

O

F

P

O

E

T

I

C

S

U

C

C

E

S

S

I

O

N

ART

TRUTH head HEART soul TRUTH

HARD

FAST

SHARP

STEEL

MADE

REAL

SWORD

ART

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

Reviews

[Celtic Cat]

wow, wow, and more wow. I just love your mind! I don't know of another who could come up with such an artful piece. It's stunning. I love it. It conjures up Quentin Tarrantinos "Kill Bill" pictures...and the man who made the swords. It is an art, for sure, just as any smithing and poetry is!! Excellent piece.

[Androglossia]

I like the message you implied here. It's stronger than the shape itself which impressed me the most. I found it easy to construct shapes but it is very hard for me to add the thought I would like to deliver. Like a foolish man, shape is nothing without the thought.

I like how you shaped it into a sword and at the same time was sucessfully able to express the thought you would like to deliver to the audience. Excellent.

[R J Askew]

Thanks Maryanne *bows*

[Muse]

Concrete poetry at its best! The red tip invoking dripped blood. Sharp and perfect. A handle made strong in grip and words!

[R E Tree]

hmm it gets you thinking. I find it hard to read and I'm not sure if it makes sense either. But I do like how some letters are red and some are black. I have noticed the words make a shape of a sword very clever indeed.

[Sheila Kline]

So wonderfully creative and so brilliantly Orlando!! You continue to mesmerize me with your artistic talent with words that spill, sputter, spin from your amazing thought letter wheel!! Wonderful!!!

[deeps]

Now this is just plain awesome!
Love this, the whole write and teh form.
Wonderfully written and thought out.
Very creative and artistic.

[Wildfleour]

Awesome and seamless combination of word and form.

[FoolsGold23]

cha ching! I'd read this before, just not commented, I loved the layout, the craft, shaped poetry could be your knack my friend! ~P

[Gandré]

This is very playful with the blood drop on it's end. Must be painful to feel this this wrath inside wants to be released... hmm this is about wanting. I think, when we don't want anything, we will get it. This was brilliant, my dear friend. What a rapier ... it is the thought that is one.

[Jessica Benfield]

amazing... you were right about the writing world being like a war - i really liked this poem, especially as it's in the form of a sword! nice! thanks for sending me this one!
smiles,
jess