MURMURATION

been meaning to write this one for a year or two .. there are beaches of black sand in some parts of the world .. here one goes a little crazy .. like starlings when the form a murmuration

Rise up, you beach of ink black sand

Rise up! Rise up! O how you stand!

Hot swirl about us, boiling storm

Reforming in this breathless air

An E, an L, a V, an O

A billion letters on the wing

A murmuration made of lives

Reforming into lines of verse

Reform! Perform! o how you storm!

Hot blinding jetness in our eyes

Dark primacies materealise

To know themselves at one with all

We settle into words-made dust

Stretched, endings, scattered on black sand

~

Reviews

[Gary H]

Is an interesting contrast between white and black. 'Reform! Perform! o how you storm' sounds like Shakespeare trying to rewrite Othello, 'O monstrous! Monstrous!' Iago replies 'Nay, this was but his dream.' (iii.3 line 423/24) But the 'dark primacies materialise' as Marlyn Manson.

[R J Askew]

Bloody hell. Is it you!? Just like old times!

[KATHY SUE SILLS]

Very out spoken poem! Full of imagery and emotion!

[Gregory Stires]

this poem shows a lot of emotion you have put into it. i like how you describe it with descriptive words and that your dictation in this poem is very good.

[SonOfPlunder]

This is fantastic! Good work, sir

[Latifa]

A billion letters on the wing
A murmeration made of lives
I like this two verses the best
the whole poem itself is interesting

[K.N. Lorenzen]

This is great, Orlando !! Magnificent language!!

[Tate Morgan]

The black beaches so different from what we all think of the beach .

[AWSklavos]

I read your poem, it reads quite nicely. Nice work.

[Ruth]

Your words are always enhanced by sublime unique imagery...
Sand..a grain of life...merged WITH life...infinite...love and respect and ongoing...this is stunning hon x

[MOON]

How we make sense and construct meaning from mere words. Lovely heartfelt write