Serves Him Right....

The boy racer drives like a nutter

down the high street

then onto the motorway

gets off the motorway.

Drives along some country roads

then into some seaside

town.

And starts to make a
twit of himself in the

resort.

Blasting his annoying air horn.

And revving his engine to

show off.

And starting to chatting up

some local lassies.

Saying you like my ride?

And the old folk of the town.

Are thinking.

Moron, twit, show off.

Later on in the evening.

Some local resident

Called Charlie.

Heard about this guy.

So came to offer him

a drag race along the quiet

seaside towns promenade.

At 1 am.

When everything is closed

and the streets are clear.

And if he lost.

He had to clear off and never

come back.

Unknown to this "boy racer".

Charlie's father had a Porsche.

And at 1 am he arrives in it.

Ready for the race.

And the racer boy was sitting in

his Volkswagon Polo.

With his flash wheel trims and mad two toned

the coloured car with his annoying airhorn of course.

With his fluffy car seat covers

and hanging dice from the windscreen mirror.

And of course.

Charlie the local lad

Kicked his arse into touch.

And this other lad

had to leave and never

return to that seaside town again.

I guess the moral of

this tale.

Is stop annoying

locals of a place

you don't know.

As someone will come along and
outsmart you and

kick your butt.

As they did to this boy racer.

Reviews

[PatrickPink]

I love the voice you've developed in this poem, casual, conversational and authentic. It truly feels as though it is drawn from experience, and I know exactly the kind of individual that you're discussing here, having encountered similar people myself. Your use of repetition to drive home your point is wonderful, as is the line 'kicked his arse in to touch'. Basically I really enjoyed this, well done!

[Onlyme]

Thanks Patrick that was really nice of you. Dawn.

[Karmee]

So very true, no one understands though until we get our own butt's kicked once in a while.
I enjoyed this write, wonderful lesson.

[Onlyme]

Cheers Kit. :)

[Annette Pisano-Higley]

Great style and storytelling skill in this colorful allegorical poem/tale dear Dawn. So richly detailed and narrated in a delightful conversational tone. Great use of colloquial language and sayings. You paint your characters interestingly and well- we feel like we know them. The cars and streets are drawn so vividly. So glad the little twit finally got his come-uppance. Had to laugh out loud at the end. Yay for the locals!

[‘Thoughts In Time..]

Lol-true-when u are in a unknown place do as the lovals do or be done in- you made me smile- rspecially witb the dice hanging in windscrren- lol- right idiot- lol- well expressed🌹

[Onlyme]

Cheers sweetheart, glad it entertained you. That was what I was hoping for in general. Dawn.

[Hasan669]

An interesting story written in the form of a free verse poem. I enjoyed this tale of 'rough justice', in that the fellow reaps what he sows, that is in acting anti-social, he is outdone by a local and has to quit town.

[Onlyme]

Thanks Hasan.

[Paul Bell]

If that boy had any brains, he would have put a turbo into that polo.
Good moral mind you. It's all in the horsepower.

[Onlyme]

Thanks Paul.

[andrew mitchell]

Boy racers,are not the brightest chaps on the road and inevitably crash. More worried about the girls and bystanders who could also be a casualty. Nice one Dawn.

[Anjeline]

Interesting one Dawn. I really liked the style of the poem. Great work 👍

[Onlyme]

Thank you Anjeline, so kind of you to say. Bless you. Dawn.

[Anjeline]

You're welcome :)

[emmajoy]

Love the way you 'attacked' that situation, shouted it, purred it, laid it, shot the road and rode it so well.. way to go, indeed! Full of fun, graphics, moral and more, Dawn. Great read.. could become an epic example of how to demolish arrogance!

[Onlyme]

Thanks emmajoy, glad you enjoyed it. Dawn.

[Einstein Noodle]

love the descriptive story telling ... there is one of those guys on every highway and byway ..pictured myself as part of that little town right away ...
E.

[Relic]

A bit of instant karma put him in his place, didn't it. Serves him right. I know of a few racers around here that could use someone to put them in their place. .....someday. :)

[Onlyme]

Cheers Relic for your thoughts. Dawn.