What an amazing and interesting look on the perspective of the observer inside the house. We notice when we are being watched, but we don't notice the person. We don't think about why they might be watching, or what is going on inside. We only think about ourselves. I really like the idea of the poem, and the way you ended it. It gives an outlook on how everyone has their own individual thing going on, that everyone struggles. I'm going to mention it again, I really like the last stanza. I especially like your word choice of "the reminder." It's a perfect way of showing how one isn't always stuck in their fear, or their reality, but they are always drawn back to it. Again, this is an amazing piece. Terrific work.
Posted 6 Years Ago
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6 Years Ago
Thank you Eve, for your very insightful thoughts and review.
This poem perfectly describes how I have felt the last few years.....very well written
Posted 6 Years Ago
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6 Years Ago
angelink, you are not alone sweetheart I hear you and do honest to God understand and relate to you... read moreangelink, you are not alone sweetheart I hear you and do honest to God understand and relate to you. massive hug from me to you. talk to me anytime.
I feel the despair in your words. Can’t do anything but exhale and take each day as it comes. Then inhale, let go and slip into the softness of sleep, to face another harrowing day awaits. That’s life. A great poem 👍🏼
Posted 6 Years Ago
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6 Years Ago
It sure is DIVYA, that is all we can do. A waiting game. To find out the results. Like a football ma.. read moreIt sure is DIVYA, that is all we can do. A waiting game. To find out the results. Like a football match. You do not even want to be even playing.
What an amazing and interesting look on the perspective of the observer inside the house. We notice when we are being watched, but we don't notice the person. We don't think about why they might be watching, or what is going on inside. We only think about ourselves. I really like the idea of the poem, and the way you ended it. It gives an outlook on how everyone has their own individual thing going on, that everyone struggles. I'm going to mention it again, I really like the last stanza. I especially like your word choice of "the reminder." It's a perfect way of showing how one isn't always stuck in their fear, or their reality, but they are always drawn back to it. Again, this is an amazing piece. Terrific work.
Posted 6 Years Ago
1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
6 Years Ago
Thank you Eve, for your very insightful thoughts and review.
It's Queenie, trying so hard to be upbeat. And not let it all drown me as well. Such is life Queenie.. read moreIt's Queenie, trying so hard to be upbeat. And not let it all drown me as well. Such is life Queenie. Thank you for your thoughts.
6 Years Ago
I have become a darkness for I lived there too long. When I became one with my darkness( accepting i.. read moreI have become a darkness for I lived there too long. When I became one with my darkness( accepting it) I found light, even ever so small as a candle it started. It almost a fire now. Seek it and it shall come.