Welcome to Hell

Welcome to hell.

The never-ending tale of torture.

Where it is constantly dark, unbearably

bleak and so soul crushing. Where the

invisible walls are coming closer

and smashing into your ribs and

crush your head and heart

and your nearly none existent human

soul to pieces.

Your body is barely surviving this ordeal.

All that keeps your company now is your

demons. The darkness is fitting like a glove.

Forever in eternal hell. No chains are

needed to secure you inside hell.

Just the nightmare of existence.

Reviews

[emipoemi]

The only thing I'm not feeling about this is the structure. It's not that it's wrong, it's that you really have to be careful when you write in such a structure, for it tends to make things weird at times. It's far better to keep each respective thought together and navigate the poem by use of line breaks (as you brilliantly in creating these four stanzas). The imagery, the overall musicality, and the narrative all come together stupendously otherwise, and I like what you've done with this. ("all that keeps YOU company"...not "your"; and also, we don't need a repetition at the end like that- "no chains are needed to secure you inside" says just the same....because we know by now as the reader that you're talking about hell). Well done!

[Kathy Van Kurin]

'Welcome to Hell'
Dawn,
I do not wish this state of being on any fellow human yet it is something we all deal with in varying degrees. What this writing did remind of though was that we can all empathize with someone who is hurting.
Blessings,
Kathy

[Nolo Segundo]

You've caught disturbingly well the power of depression to pull your mind, and perhaps even your soul down into hell in this world-- and perhaps the next. For what it's worth, I can offer 2 things that helped me to overcome a depression that almost destroyed me, body and soul as it were, long ago in my 20's. First is what my doctor taught me: depression has 2 parts, anger and sadness. By nature life is often sad, but it's the unconscious ANGER THAT TURNS IT INTO DEPRESSION. Analyze what you're angry about, and the depression may lift. If that isn't enough, then pray-- pray to God, Allah, Vishnu, call the Divine what you will, just know that your immortal part, your soul, can respond to transcendent healing.

[Onlyme]

Thank you Nolo for your very interesting and articulate review. Bless you Dawn.

[Chris Shaw]

A realistic account of depression and anxiety, recognised by all who have been afflicted with this misery from time to time. Thankfully it does go.

Chris

[Onlyme]

Thank you Christine for your thoughts and sadly yes. The modern curse. Is depression. Felt by millions around this world. Including me.

[Misery]

No perfumed dressing gowns need adorn these words. They come naked and they come straight from your precious core of inspiration. Thank you for sharing your words, dear poet.

[Onlyme]

Thank you Misery for understand me.

[Misery]

You are surely welcome, Dee.

[Maylin]

Really made me feel what depression feels like. It starts to loose traction at the second paragraph (is that the word). You have to think about what the second paragraph means to hard. Love the last line. It ties it all together.

[Amy R]

Reminds me of how life on earth is hell or heaven, whichever you prefer,
it sounds ironic, but its all on us humans and how we choose to walk through the journey of life.
Reminds me of a great quote "The energy of the mind, is the essence of life.- Aristotle"
Great write. -Amy

[Jack O]

Seems more like life than hell.

[emipoemi]

I think that's the joke.....

[Onlyme]

it is. ironically speaking. life is hell. and hell is life.

[emipoemi]

I wouldn't say it has to be....#lifeswhatyoumakeit

[Onlyme]

I agree life is what you make it, but if your in deep bouts of depression and anxiety. It is not always easy to look on the bright side at those moments and times in your life.

[emipoemi]

Don't I know it....been that way for some time.....but we should never lose hope.

[Onlyme]

I agree, totally with you.