Silence

Hello or Goodbye?
Silence mixed with echoes as the last tears falls.
Reminiscing on her greatest love of all .
Make up your mind.
Waiting.
The clock ticks -reminder that we are running out of time.

Nothing lasts forever. Nothing is the same.
Silence...no noise.
Ashes are all that remains .

Stay forever or leave for good.
You had a choice, ball was in your court.
No noise but silence is understood.
No response. No sound of your voice.

No more tears can I cry.
I no longer will ask you the reasons why.
Baby, goodbye.

Reviews

[barleygirl]

In my life experience, nothing good ever comes from discussing the end of a relationship with the person that's soon to be gone from one's life. Many think they are going for "closure" but all that happens is two people continue to argue about things they haven't been able to agree on for years. It's hard to take that silence & go, but that's what works best. Your poem feels like a mix between wanting to be brave & walk away boldly, yet also having those pesky regrets that lure the narrator back into it. The narrator seems to want to end it, but there's lots of second thoughts running between the lines that makes this feel realistic for how these things go (((HUGS))) Fondly, Margie

[Betty Hermelee]

It's always sorrowful to reminisce about someone you love as their life is ending, There is really nothing each of you can do to make it easier. There are always regrets, yet there are always memories uplifting and sad. The only positive in this setting is that the end of someone's life that you cherish , can be a closure to you, the one that is grieving.
Best, B.

[Coyote Poetry]

I agree dear Laconic.
"Nothing lasts forever. Nothing is the same.
Silence...no noise.
Ashes are all that remains ."
The above lines. Real truth written. When we forget love. Only ashes of a dream is left. Thank you for sharing the amazing poetry and your thoughts.
Coyote

[John Alexander McFadyen]

A very sad recounting of a laconic partner as they slip into the rear view mirror. Ons slight glitch :- "as the last tears fall.' rather than falls.

[Hope]

The emotions said and unsaid conveyed very well to me as a reader. With short, crisp verses, you articulated the pain of saying goodbye. Glad to have read this.

[Laconic Meraki]

I'm glad that you read it to. 😊
Thank you.

[Neville]

that's that then ... sad but it happens .. and it happens all the time .. now ya gotta take a deep breath and move on ... sshh.. and quietly .. fingers crossed maybe nobody will notice :)

[Chris Shaw]

Breakups are painful. The silence hurts. The we now becomes the I. Sometimes the noise of an argument is better than deadly silence. Felt the sadness here.

Chris

[Chris]

Some sounds are so large you never hear them... and others are so hurt-full, you never want to.

You notice how we don't always understand our tomorrows and how the yesterdays just don't fit? Life has this way of just happenin' and we ...we stare into our "nights".

[Robert Trakofler]

Silence for me can be a welcome friend or a chalkboard scratch screech! The uneasy silence of unrequited love is a ponderous roar and one that has Even killed:( nice to meet you I am robert

[X]

I love it! Silence speaks louder than words...move on girl and let your heart sing :)

[Laconic Meraki]

Easier said than done.
Im learning to love myself for now. 🤞

[Laconic Meraki]

Thank you for taking the time to read.💋

[X]

Love begins at home always...:) Ditto...my pleasure!

[Laconic Meraki]

You really say ditto too?
Let's not only keep "hope" alive.
The use of the word "ditto" too.
That was definitely serendipitous. 💋

[X]

Indeed, Indeed...it's a pleasure to meet you lovely poetess :)

[Laconic Meraki]

Lol. Ditto.