Your Love Was a Car Crash

love that means the world until it wrecks itself

Your love was like a car crash

my entire body numb

to the moment 

impact inevitable in the face

of what we were,

all twisted metal 

and twisted arms 

each part holding the other tight

as the world collapsed around us. 

We were just teens

driving at eighty three

reckless in the name of freedom

moments passed like bullets

on the battle ground

we didn’t know was coming,

it was all broken phones

against yelling

and no way to understand hearts swelling,

crying eyes against night skies

and two wrecked cars in between us.

This love broke me

lying in the backseat

waiting for us to get home,

trying to apologize

with blood stuck in my throat,

and expectations that never made it

left totaled against each other

in the dark

Reviews

[John Alexander McFadyen]

The allegory of a car crash is worked well in this tale of the brutal forces in play as emotions collide and love splinters apart leaving bleeding broken hearts all over the carriageway!

[Julie McCarthy (juliesp..]

thankyou so much for entry into my competition, loved this good luck

[Carina Baumert]

One of the most original poems I've read here. A dark and beautiful metaphor about heartache. Well written.

[KCthelastboyscout]

This analogy works.The end of love is painful to the mind and body.It hurts everywhere and the scars are marked on your heart rather than your skin