Belle

I see so many people with low self esteem due to societal standards..thats crazy. And unhealthy. This was just a quick little piece about organic beauty. Targeted towards females but it applies to all

I love the way you look
as you're settled down for night.
I love the way you look
when you just opened your eyes.
The subtle curves that give you form
from one day to the next,
are one of many things that make me
take you in our bed.
I need not for the facial paint that
you wear day to day.
Beauty is best organically!
Thats all I have to say.
I long for little more than you
as simple as that seems.
You're more than all those other girls,
just being you; beauty.

Author's Note

I'll do a different version later on, this is just a quick place holder.

Reviews

[klawrites]

There is so much truth and passion in this and that's what makes it absolutely beautiful. Thank you for sharing your great work- I'll be reading more.

[Chase]

Thank you for a wonderful review, i really appreciate it and cant wait to see what you like about my other pieces! Ill be taking a look at yours as well.

[Skye]

I have a lot of thoughts on this piece!
First off, you're writing is gorgeous. I love how simple the words are, how well they fit together to paint the meaning of the poem. That too, is very gracious. Men and women should be aware of their own self worth and beauty, and not compare themselves to the standards set by others.
However, some of the points in your poem do make me cringe. Now, this is not a comment on you, or your writing, just a few, perhaps, overlooked misconceptions you've made that don't sit well with me.
While it is true that some women wear makeup because they are self conscious of their natural face and that the makeup industry reaps heavy profit for this - many woman don't wear it to look good for others. It's not something that they do outwardly for others at all. I, and pretty much all of my friends, wear makeup because it makes us feel good to wear it. Whether this is good for us is up for debate, but we, frankly, don't spend an hour winging eyeliner just for some guy - or another girl - on the street to notice. And I may not be able to speak for all women, but most of us really don't care what our significant other thinks of the makeup because we're going to wear it regardless. And your second point may be more damaging than you realize, but the line 'you're more than all the other girls, just being you' implies that some women are worth more than others and are more deserving of love - this may not be what you intended, but it is what is said. And that simply isn't true. Women should not be pitted against each other in competition for acceptance and love by society or loved ones, especially when they are being measured against is how well they follow a social standard - either being themselves or how well they pretend they aren't themselves. Each person should be encouraged to let their own beauty flourish independent of others. The beauty and worth of one person is not lessened or improved by the beauty and worth of another.
Again, I'm sure your message was genuine, these are just my own thoughts.

[Chase]

I cant give this speal the response it deserves since im on my phone and not a laptop but I'll note at a few things you said.

I have many friends, relatives, female companions who have all dealt with the issues in the esteem spectrum but most commonly the root of it comes down to gow they feel wearing makeup versus not. Ive had many in depth conversations with a myraid of people and what it comes down to has nearly always been judgement by others, or fear of it. Rarely has the truth been that they wear it purely for themselves.

As to your cringing of comparing her beauty to others; that you'll have to deal with, plain and simple. Its an opinion that any is free to have, and it warps and changes throughout a relationship. When im with someone, they are the most beautiful person in the world to me, regardless of all else. Comparisons are the bread and butter of literally EVERYTHING in life. Without them, there is no opinion. So stop cringing. My poem may have opinions, but the logic is fact.

[Natasha]

I honestly at the end of the day rather talk to someone with an intellectual brain, than someone who just looks "pretty" on the outside. It's sad that there is this stigma and culture around looking young forever, never getting old, and vanity. It's all good in small doses, but beauty comes from within. I know when I talk to someone and I don't think they are super physically attractive (since we all naturally are attracted to certain people of course), but we have mutual interests - it makes that person seem more attractive over all. No one wants to talk to a bag of rocks :)

Rant over I suppose. With this poem I don't personally think it is one of your best and doesn't have that innate flow as some of your others. However, you did say you'd work on a better version later. I do like the overall message and see why you wrote it!

[Chase]

Society is as society does. It attraction is a paradox, no matter what culture you pass over. Attraction starts with what you seen, in nearly all cases (internet dating and meeting has warped this) and more occurs after that. Ive had flings with absolutely gorgeous girls, and the reason it never turned more than a fling was due to personality. A pretty face will only get you so far and isnt worth long term if whats underneath isnt as beautiful, but physical beauty is a standard, regardless. Its an idiotic peacock dance.