Dead Battery

Just a little share.

They just left

Made a choice to leave

Not realizing who they left behind

The people who were a part of them

We would do anything for them

Absolutely anything

But they left

Who are they now?

I don't know

Do you know them?

Are we the bad people?

They keep trying to charge a dead battery 

Sweety, it's dead!

Stop!

No more pretending!

The smiles and tears are dry

Bond is shattered

It's just so sick

We all knew this was going to happen

I want new just as much as you

But not everyone is fortunate 

No one is perfect

Please, no more pretending

It just hurts 

Remember, you left us for a new battery.

Author's Note

Feedback is greatly appreciated! :)

Reviews

[A. Amos]

Now this poem can take you deep down somewhere in your mind, where hardly one visit. I felt the pain and the misery you portrait...I find your poem exteremly alive. People don't even give a chance to charge the battery, they consider it dead and they go for new one. Brilliant piece of writing and as always love to read your work, you left a great message in this read. Trust me many will feel related to your work!

Welcome back pal:)

[Mary Ochoa]

Truly, Thank you so much Amos for being such a supportive friend in my work. I really appreciate your kind review:)

[Daydreamer]

I really like this one, Mary! It had a vintage and original feel to it. I wonder if you are an old soul... :) Keep up the great work.

[Mary Ochoa]

Thank you soo much Daydreamer! :) I really appreciate it.

[New Theory]

Good job Mary, keep it up.

[Mary Ochoa]

Thank you! :)

[The Representative]

It does go off on a tangent. At least it does to my perception.

I perceive a change in tone, come the latter and final sentences.

[♔ CrownedDevil &#..]

WOW, this poem really cuts deep. There's building up emotion with in piece, so powerful. I enjoyed reading this write, nicely penned.

Kaze~

[Mary Ochoa]

Thank you so much my friend! :) I'm glad that you had a pleasant read.

[♔ CrownedDevil ☾]

It was my pleasure. :-)

[diaphanous]

I really enjoyed this piece. The sense of pain and urgency is what drove the tone for me. I felt like there was this ever growing desperation and dread in each line, really intense. Well done.

[Mary Ochoa]

Thank you diaphanous for reading! :)

[Sami Khalil]

"No more pretending!
The smiles and tears are dry
Bond is shattered
It's just so sick
We all knew this was going to happen
I want new just as much as you
But not everyone is fortunate
No one is perfect"

I like the analogy about the dead battery and the new one...Bravo.....................

[Mary Ochoa]

Thank you so much Sami for reading! I'm really pleased that you enjoyed this read:)

[Sami Khalil]

You are welcome...:)......