Under a Radar

Be safe!

He watched her every move
Every step
Every swing
Every stop
Until he got his chance
He approached her
Nowhere to run or hide
She had no idea
Her every move was under a radar
Heart beats with fright
Confusion
Screaming to herself
Trying to remember
She doesn't remember his face anywhere
His words
"I've been watching you"
Won't stop replaying in her head
In her dreams
Chills run through her skin
What does she do?
Hide?
Run?
Scream?
Her every move was under a radar

Reviews

[Vidya Bacchus]

I will strive to stay out of Theory's comment this time lol.This was creepy and yet so very good .Awesome Mary :)

[Mary Ochoa]

Lol Thank you so much Vidya!:)

[Vidya Bacchus]

You are welcome :)

[Natalie Dieudonne]

Definitely a creepy piece but in a good way if that makes any sense :)
Nice work!

[Mary Ochoa]

Thank you Natalie for reading! :)

[Natalie Dieudonne]

You're welcome :)

[New Theory]

Creepy stalker poem, good one :)

[Mary Ochoa]

haha Thank you for the read and review! :)

[New Theory]

you are welcome, please correct me if I was wrong in my interpretation

[Mary Ochoa]

No yes you are correct, he is a creepy stalker :)

[Sami Khalil]

Another good poem from you romantic pen...:)..................

[Mary Ochoa]

Thank you so much Sami! :) I appreciate your review:)

[Sami Khalil]

You are welcome...:)....................

[Utkarsh Singh]

mary nice one ..now u r under my radar .....lol :D.....keep sending me ......love it ........

[Mary Ochoa]

Lol Nice! Thank you for reading and I appreciate your review! :) ... Great I will. Thank you :)

[Utkarsh Singh]

U r welcome...........;) :D

[A. Amos]

This work seem like watching a thriller, great write my friend...

[Mary Ochoa]

Thank you Amos! :) Aiming for a little mystery and improvement in my work so I'm glad you saw it as a thriller:)

[A. Amos]

You're most welcome my dear...

[Raymond Federle]

Some people liked to be watched...however one can feel the unpleasantness and fear in this piece. Well done! :)

[Mary Ochoa]

Very true Raymond:) Thank you for your review:)

[AndrewCT]

An easy read, what I like about it is the uncertainty of the man's intentions. He could be anything from a harmless stalking creep, to a rapist, to a murderer and I understand that the woman feels the same way.

[Mary Ochoa]

Yes exactly. Thank you for noticing the uncertainty for the man's intentions. I'm for improvement to have a little mystery to it. I appreciate your review:)

[The Representative]

Was it going to be something different, was a question I asked when reading.


The man, was his intent benign? This was what I would've hoped for - the subversion of expectation.



You wrote well Mary; you're a very readable writer.

[Mary Ochoa]

Thank you for reading and a great review:) I appreciate it. I tried to make it mysterious as for what was his real intent. I'm aiming for improvement.