And Yet So Close (Stillness)

Thanks to a brilliant writer who inspired me, I wrote this as a part 2 to the Haiku "Far Away." Here you can clearly see a more mature spiritual awakening, transcending the futility of the previous poem.

Touched the still night sky

Stars stuck to my fingertips

Like seashells to sand

 

Stillness spoke to me

A ripple to stagnant lakes

Once untouchable

 

In my palm, the skies

Wider than what I conceive

Within—transcending

 

Closer to the sun

Than fleeting flames—than transient

Amber afterglow

 

Closer to the moon

Than short-lived shooting stars, than

Glimpses of stardust

 

In eternity

I call to the timelessness

But it is—in me

 

What I thought was not

Was within all along, so

Close, so close, so close…

 

Author's Note

Thank you Kena :)

This is also inspired by a long night of meditation and stillness which I experienced yesterday. It's just that success and presence are two concepts that mix.

Reviews

[Don Coorough]

Again, I am so very impressed by your ability to transcend conscious reality and find the beautiful mystery within super-consciousness. Have you read Thoreau? Have you read a book called "Cosmic Consciousness by Burke? Have you read Whitman, Blake or Gary Snyder? Do you read Zen? This is absolutely fabulous writing for anyone at any age, but if you are 17, then you best know what your calling is already and continue to strive on in developing your craft and technique. You have serious talent! - EllisD

[Gandré]

In my palm, the skies

Wider than what I conceive

Within-transcending -----------I loved this stanza. beautiful crown haiku composition.

[Celtic Cat]

First off.... love this poem. It is a very stellar piece. Secondly... I'm mad envious of your obtaining stillness today!!! lol I can't remember the last time I even tried! gah. Thanks for the wake up call, my friend, I really needed it.
This poem is absolutely wonderful.... and I hope THIS inspires some more writing! keep it up!!

[Kia]

Wonderful...i felt this way yesterday as well.....very calming and quiet piece. I enjoyed it.

It would be nice if you also suggest a song that goes along, it works well with a poem like yours :)

Great choice of words, good form, good flow, well painted imagery.

A good piece.

[RHEA CROSLEY]

There is a sense of being apart of the celestial and yet transcendent from it with the eternal aspect of mans heart. Very good mix on the concepts. Thanks.

[Sydelle Houston]

Excellent poem, took me away from my environment and within my soul for the duration. Well, meditation makes you increase the function of the brain, remember we only use 1/8th of it everyday. It's apparent from this poem that you powered up big time! Hurry up and get a book published so I can say I knew you when!

[emmajoy]

To see is to understand, to feel is to live.

Your poem is truly beautiful and shows not only your creativity but your heart.

'In eternity
I call to the timelessness
But it is-in me'

[Kena Dawn Augustine]

Wow, that was amazing! as always. Thanks for being inspired by me and calling me a "brilliant writer" that was such a big compliment! i feel honored!!

You have a way of writing in such a professional and mature way, and always using the eternities and cosmos as the theme, is not easy to do. You take us on a journey in this one, I can actually feel the stars, as seashells, touching my fingertips, and I can see the ambient afterglow of the sun, and it's warmth against my skin.

You take us on a journey through the cosmos and the beauty it brings, where we end up deep inside ourselves, looking inward, in an introspective embrace as self love permeates our vast depts of the human heart.

You should think about publishing this one. Definitely.

Kena

[Emily Elizabeth]

You just keep getting better!
You are really improving, your work is becoming tighter, more polished. This a gorgeous, inspired piece! I really loved it. You are a master poet!