Starmaker

I used to have a major, almost ABNORMAL crush on someone a few years back.

I watch you shyly from behind the curtains
Every single fragrant night
Confidently, you roam the sky
Leaving a trace of stars so bright
I love the miracles you bring to life
Sequins hanging in the sky
So I can melt as I watch your pride
And the way you float, the way you smile
All the allure I found in you
And all the marvels that you do

Oh�Starmaker

You're the one who crowns the night
With magic dust, and crystal sight
A sign of peace amid a fight
As free as an angel; a tailless kite

When I see you there, I start to melt
For all this time, with this I've dealt
This feeling inside
Which I've tried to hide
You leave my knots
Smoothly untied
This kind of love
I've never tried
I wish, with you, up there, I'd glide

With all my feelings you have toyed
Obliviously you've filled the void
But thank you, thank you
For all the times
You let me watch you in the sky
No words can shape into your being
Or paint a picture that's worth seeing
But you will remain in my mind
Now, and every other night

Your passion your charm,
I stretch out my arms
You give me this vibe
Which I cannot describe�

You make me hate the morning shine
Because I know by night you're mine
I eagerly wait for the nighttime
When I can get drunk on you like wine�

Intoxicated by the pale moonlight,
I watch you when you're about to take flight

All I know is you will be gone
And all what's left will be your reflection
And I should probably try to be strong
So I'll patiently await your resurrection
I'll gaze for nights at your constellation
A subtle symbol of my salvation

You put the angels and seraphs to shame
Every time they hear your name
Because you're more heavenly than any of them
You color the sky with radiant gems

I feel your stars under my skin
An itch�a longing so deep within
I think about you night and day
And you wash all the pain away

As I gaze at you, blessing the sky right now
You carry my heart�and you know how
I know you're shy
Scared to declare
Your love for me
In the tropical air

Oh, Starmaker
Come down here
Let's lay down
Beneath moonbeams
Confess your love
Right now to me
God, this seems just so surreal
To say your words, you bend you head�
Then I wake up, alone in my bed
No Starmaker�
No maker of stars
And the touchable sky just seems so dark

It's all so real now, it's all so clear�
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With no You
To light up my life
There's no more need for me to strive
For love or life
For peace or light
And this, to you,
Is my goodbye�

Author's Note

It may not be perfect, maybe noticably repetetive or long, not well-metered, but it was just the way I felt at the time, just a compilation of my emotions at their purest form.

Reviews

[DRIVEN]

I love the emotions expressed so deeply and clearly...no judgement available to me for something so sweet!!
Don't change a thing!!!!!

[Omar]

Thank you guys so much, I really appreciate your reviews. The reason why I was so self-conscious about this piece is because I wrote it in ninth grade i.e two years ago. It also is of HUGE importance to me, it means a lot. And I've tried to edit it as much as possible, yet couldn't find myself changing too much. And every time I read it, I remember the intensity of it, and the pure emotions I was experiencing. It really is personal. Anyway, thank you both so much

[Emily Elizabeth]

Aw... This seriously nearly made me cry... This is absolutely adorable/lovely/sad/sweet! This is absolutely gorgeous. This is my favorite of yours. Your style of writing is so delicate, eloquent and deep. Its emotional and yet you take the reader on the same journey you went on. Thanks for sharing us your deepest feelings. You shouldn't feel self-conscious, as Emily Rose said, poems should be written from the heart.

[Emily Rose]

It's so sweet! Don't be self-conscious about it - it's a marvelous work. Yeah, there are times where the meter is a little off (the only really noticable one for me was this line: "I watch you when you're about to take flight" but that can be very easily fixed) and some of the rhymes seems a bit forced at points, but such is the price of emotional poetry. For a "spontaneous overflow of emotion" (as Wordsworth would call it) this is really wonderful and more beautiful than I think you're giving it credit for. The ending is so sad, especially after such a wonderful buildup. This is a truly beautiful poem and your emotions flow through it like water. Wonderful job!