Planets

 

Distant planets

A distant bliss

Unreachable heavens

I'm bound to miss

 

Starlight is a demo version

A sample of

A beautiful kiss

 

Clouds float by

And I'm stranded here

Sailboats drifting through the sky

As I die in jealousy

 

How stupid; how naïve

How ambitious to believe

That stars could be reached

Through a bridge I build by tears

Ocean pearls which I shape

Into planets far away

Comettails that drift away

Leave me frigid in today

 

Constellations are a splendor

Unreachable, they make me wonder

I reach out to the wind

To find my palms drenched in sin

 

Before galaxies, I stand minute

Bound and tied, blind and mute

Away from sunlight in a crystal air

I cannot breathe

A dying flare

 

Hold me—save me

I am scared

Scared of myself

Scared to declare

Scared to be a nova star

Reaching stardust—going far

 

Black holes

That I

I embed in my skies

They swallow me whole,

As I pretend they're not mine

 

My solar system

A complication

A cocktail of moons

And satellites

But someday,  I

Will find my way,

The yellow-brick road

Unto the lights

Reviews

[...]

you've already
found your way
to a galaxy of
spectacular poets
one day
the universe will know

[J]

"Starlight is a demo version
A sample of
A beautiful kiss"

All right, you little upstart! Tis not polite to surpass the limits of your ....... uh ....... [oh, how I hate this] "elders." There! Demo version! lol!

With each new write, I realize that what I've always read of you is still here ....... but now, in this, your fingertips have brushed those stars that have kept your focus above the chaos and destruction of your world . . . always.

I don't normally make a practice of quoting great amounts of text [a cheap way to accumulate points to some], but I find your original imagery so compelling, I must recount it to you so you know how spellbinding it truly is:

"How stupid; how na�ve
How ambitious to believe
That stars could be reached
Through a bridge I build by tears
Ocean pearls which I shape
Into planets far away
Comettails that drift away
Leave me frigid in today"

The raw honesty of this stanza begs tears, O. "Ocean pearls which I shape" ?? Remarkable.

Bravo, dearest.

Love,
j

[Wolfwind Words]

This was a beautiful poem!
The weaving of stellar concepts into the feeling of longing and sorrow really brought out the emotion and the visual effects in the readers mind.

I found hope in the end of these words as the yellow brick road shall be found some day.

A wonderful piece of artistic expression mixed with your own feelings.

Great Poem
Keep up the good work!
Infinity's Shadow