Mountaintop

As dawn broke forth and tinged the sky with amber

He opened his eyes to the morning dew

Dewdrops or teardrops—he did not know

 

The sun—so distant—so—divine

God-like in its majesty

Bathing him with its morning rays

Scorching his skin to show him love

 

He stretches his arms to touch the gold

To feel the glitter on his palms

And a puff of gentle wind arises

A breeze—a whisper

 

He's aware he is

On a mountaintop

 

All alone

 

The sound of nothingness

Like a silent movie,

Deafens his ears—

 

An urge to scream

 

And down he stares—a planet or two away

Is the rest of the world

People busy with their soil-bound lives

 

Millions

Of millions

Of worlds away

 

And the sunlight closes his eyelids

He is on a mountaintop

In the seventh layer of the sky

With amber light

And cloud—and breeze

 

Reviews

[...]

I'd always wondered about the seventh layer of the sky without knowing what I was wondering about.

[Don Coorough]

You write wonderfully, as I have said in multiple reviews. Please, keep at it and keep sharing. You have uplifted my day tremendously. I am so glad I read you this morning! You have changed my whole day with a few beautiful poems! Thank you! -EllisD

[Celtic Cat]

What a wonderful place!!!! The seventh layer of the sky....how sublime. Gosh this is so beautiful I could spend all day in this poem. There's so much coming off the screen it's literally warming my heart chakra! What a splendid piece! Your writing is superb!!!! this is going into my favorites library so I can revisit it all I like!! Thanks so much for creating this drop of beauty.

[PENS FOR PEACE /TJ CALI..]

A beautiful and inspiring poem! It's reaches deep down to one's soul!
I'm waiting to reach my mountain top of life after dwelling in the valleys of despair for so long!
(read my story if you don't believe me!)
Keep writing and always write with such passion!
Mostly keep writing, for the good of all souls!
TIM

[Emily Elizabeth]

WOW!
Simply wow!
The pure essence and beauty of this poem is awe-inspiring, deep and expansive. It really touches the reader. This is poetry in its most divine form! This poem is almost lonely, but it is about the human soul, which is born without a companion. We all must get to know ourselves, and that's something that I think you're doing now. We're both seventeen and I can totally understand that lonely and yet sublime experience of first finding your feet and yourself in this world. I think this poem is your subconscious exploring that, in the most fantastic and ultimate way, your imagination reaching out. Your spirit really goes beyond this world! This is fantastic piece of existentialism, the two contrasts- being alone and isolated and planets of millions of people- defining this.
Sorry if I'm getting this completely wrong!
I especially loved this line:

And down he stares-a planet or two away
Is the rest of the world
People busy with their soil-bound lives
Millions
Of millions
Of worlds away

Amazing piece!

[J]

Ohmygosh, my O, I am staggered by the depth and expanse of your work! Indeed, this feels like half-sleep dream remnants . . . "In the seventh layer of the sky . . ." oh MY! I wish I'd written that! You have been stagnating at WC ~ without appreciation, truly. But amazingly, despite the forum, your soul has exceeded bounds I'd forgotten were too restrictive always anyway. How gratifying to find this passion has found the voice only you could give it. Third person perspective [contrary to my usual opinion] lends so much more power . . . I see this fledgling glittering in innocent dew ~ morning fresh, bedhead silly...

"And down he stares-a planet or two away
Is the rest of the world
People busy with their soil-bound lives"

Ah gees, you've no clue how I can plug into the sense of separation, isolation ~ scared silly as to the state of the human condition. And feeling powerless to make even a ripple . . .

Beautiful write, my friend. Have I told you how happy I am to have you here!?

Love,
j

[Mistral Bilgera]

the poem is filled with such imagery, very vivid and majestic :) makes me wanna thank God for his marvelous gift of nature to mankind :)

great piece! :)