The Artist

The Artist

A Poem by olympiuslu
"

You were an artist of pain.

"

Your hands are as soft as the pillow

that I lay my head on at night

I have been dreaming,

dreaming of torture and executions

people tied up to the walls

 

 Under those sheets my hands became yours

you were an artist

an artist of pain

and I was your canvas

your brush was like a blade

trailing along the skin

blood like paint

splattered

and made the most beautiful landscape

 

You painted a masterpiece

that I had to eventually turn to ashes

in the scorching flames

 but still you see right through me

like an x-ray

you pick out my bones

like a hungry dog.

 

and now

my tears

they burn like acid

down my cheeks

taking with them

my flesh

like candle wax.


© 2018 olympiuslu


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......wow! There is a high intensity of power to this! The images are strong, the flow is relatively neat; you make some repetitions that aren't really necessary (they add nothing to the overall piece, and sometimes they mar the flow), so I would suggest taking a look at those. But this is overall brilliant! I could feel the power that it exuded. Well done!

Posted 6 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

olympiuslu

6 Years Ago

Thank you so much, always grateful for your comments!
emipoemi

6 Years Ago

my pleasure.



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This is a well written dark and equally thought provoking piece. You can imagine well and that says in your piece

Posted 5 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

olympiuslu

5 Years Ago

Thank you!
'and now my tears, they burn like acid' nice write

Posted 6 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

olympiuslu

6 Years Ago

Thank you!
good good good i liked it. It was like a paper cut.

Posted 6 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

olympiuslu

6 Years Ago

I'll take that as a compliment, thank you!
This is really impressive. You chose the words well.

Posted 6 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

olympiuslu

6 Years Ago

Thank you!
"Under those sheets my hands became yours
you were an artist
an artist of pain
and I was your canvas..."

Powerful lines and great closure...I'd say you were the artist!


Posted 6 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

olympiuslu

6 Years Ago

Wow that is so nice of you, thanks!
Superb imagery and emotion! This is really something...drew me in and didn't release me from beginning to end, sublime power woven in this :)

Posted 6 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

olympiuslu

6 Years Ago

Thank you very much, that is so kind of you!
very powerful, very intense. well done :)

Posted 6 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

olympiuslu

6 Years Ago

Thank you!
oh wow, this is painfully beautiful! you created something so heartbreaking but chose to put a practically elegant view on it, it is so somber yet so lovely. If this poem is an experience of the writer, I can say that you have the power to overcome any pain by turning it into gold just like you did with this poem.

Posted 6 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

olympiuslu

6 Years Ago

Wow thank you! That is so kind of you and I really needed that.
This is brilliantly written! I'm not a big fan of heartbreak pieces, but here you've outdone the other ten million heartbreak poems by many miles. Your imagery is intense & yet gradually flowing to a crescendo of feeling. Your imagery is such an exquisite blend of beautiful & terrible, exactly the way it can be when love hurts. Here, for the first time, I'm convinced about why some people stay in bad situations -- your seductively painful lines are THAT impactful! (((HUGS))) Fondly, Margie

Posted 6 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

olympiuslu

6 Years Ago

That is such a compliment, I really appreciate it Margie thank you!
Wonderful use of words. You made the reader believe and understand every word. A artist can steal our heart and leave us wanting more. Thank you my friend for reading and the comment.
Coyote

Posted 6 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

olympiuslu

6 Years Ago

Thank you!!
Coyote Poetry

6 Years Ago

A amazing poem and you are welcome.

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