Daddy

Daddy I miss you

everyday I try to get closer to you

the scars on my wrist act as a tally chart,

each one marking yet another day of betrayal

Another day gone without you.

 

 How could you leave me daddy?

Leave me with Mommy,

Mommy who fell in love with the bottle

and left me as a ghost,

 

I always thought you were the ghost

you were never really there

I knew your blood was poisonous

and your arms were always bruised

Daddy you think me selfish

But you were the one to choose.

 

I decided that I couldn’t see it through

Daddy I can’t live without you

 I laid in the bath and my wrists began to smile

Daddy I'm done

I'm through.

Author's Note

This is inspired by the poem 'Daddy' by Sylvia Plath, it is NOT autobiographical.
If you want, you can read it yourself through this link: https://www.poetryfoundation.org/poems/48999/daddy-56d22aafa45b2

Reviews

[Alexa Apothic Red]

I am glad that you clarified your inspiration for your piece in your note. My favorite line: "I laid in the bath and my wrists began to smile" OOOOHHHH, goosebumps! That gave me straight chills! It shows the satisfaction of drifting away into nothingness, to no longer feel the void and pain.. I was going to say if this was about you, that in some ways we share a similar background in that my father abandoned us when I was 5 years old never to be a part of my life again-he was a drug dealer/abuser. Then my mom became an alcoholic.. and I have stories and stories to tell on the subject (this is the main premise for the book I am writing)... but if this isn't a reflection of your true past, then still, well done, capturing the haunting pain of such an experience. Great work, girl!

[olympiuslu]

Thank you so much for so many kind comments. It really saddens me to hear about your background and what you must of gone through but at the same time it is also so inspiring to hear that you are writing about it, so brave! Just know that I am always a message away if you ever need someone to talk to, if you want someone new to share your stories with, I would be inspired to hear them. Thanks again for taking the time to read my writing!

[Alexa Apothic Red]

That's sweet! You're welcome, and thank you-it's nice to meet another friend here. And likewise-do the same.

[Serendipity Planet]

I am glad it's not about you
Its beautiful anyway :)

[olympiuslu]

Thank you!

[therealtadkent]

Very intense. The phrase about the tally chart was the best. Another lovely work from you.

[olympiuslu]

As always I owe you a big thank you!

[Empress Ophelia]

I love this so much. I can feel the pain you may have experienced with your father not being present, I had a similar story. Thank you for the beautiful read. I hope you can take the time out to read some of my work.

[olympiuslu]

I'm sorry to hear that you must be so strong. However, this is not an autobiographical piece of writing for me, but thank you for such kind comments. I would love to read your work and will get round to it soon!

[Lavi]

This gave me chills. A lot of emotion portrayed here. First person too, and pulled it off. Scary but scary good.

[olympiuslu]

Wow thank you!

[Lavi]

It's an interesting connection too that I have with one of the lines, where the speaker felt their father was a ghost, I felt similarly for many years too with my own father, even if my situation is different than the speakers. Hence my chills. Poetry connecting with your readers in some way is always a mark of good writing ;)

[olympiuslu]

Well It's sad to hear that, I'm sorry.
At the same time I am also very humbled and proud that you are able to find a connection to my writing in some way. Thanks for sharing!

[Lavi]

Life isn't flawless so don't worry, despite some aspects of my life being downright sad it works getting to know yourself, if that makes any sense. What I'm trying to say is I'm moving on from that event but it's that relation that helps me connect. Writers who haven't been in it but can connect to their readers despite that is truly a mark of talent. That's all I'm trying to say, and thank you for sharing your work!

[olympiuslu]

Of course, I completely understand that. I feel like a piece of writing is both as important for the reader as it is the writer as it provides both with an emotional escape. Thank you for connecting with me!

[BlackPrince]

This is deeply emotional poem.

I want you to be strong and carry on
no matter how hard things get sometimes.
Any child longing for mum or dad's love is such a sad reality that many children live through today.

Thank you for expressing your innermost thoughts and sharing them with the rest of us.

May God bless you, guide you, protect you and prosper you successfully in all you do.
May your writing inspire millions more.
Keep writing and dating your poems to build a portfolio of poems to publish one day.
Read more and write more.

WELL DONE!!

[olympiuslu]

I know it is so sad to think that some people have to fight for the love of their parents, I don't think I could ever capture that as well as Sylvia did.
Thank you for such inspiring comments and taking the time to read my writing!

[BlackPrince]

You're welcome.
I'll always try my best to pay attention to my fellow poets' writing in my reviews.

[olympiuslu]

Well you're doing a great job!

[Coyote Poetry]

A very sad poem. Sylvia Plath, on suicide watch most of her life. Your poem heavy with sadness and the ending. A dead-end for the person. Thank you for sharing your amazing words and thoughts.
Coyote

[olympiuslu]

I know, such an amazing poet with such a sad ending. Thank you for reading my work and leaving such lovely comments! I really appreciate it.

[Coyote Poetry]

Was my pleasure and you are welcome dear Poet. You are right. A great talent who was lost too soon.