The Glass

First thing posted on here in a while..

The Glass

No matter where I see it,

I'm determined to shatter it to bits.

It's something I despise,

Their voices leaking with lies

It's an ungodly look,

The pain beneath her eyes,

She's been mistaken,

For someone who rarely cries.

As soon as my fist makes impact,

I realize it's confidence,

I seem to lack.

The time of day seems to collide,

And I can't seem to tell the truth from the lies.

I feel as if I am shattering my own soul,

That stares back at me through the glass.

Author's Note

Back for the time being... I need a break from Twin Blades...Took forever to write the first part...

Reviews

[C. Lee Battaglia]

amazingly written!
I see so much potential in your writing!
my favorite part was, "It's an ungodly look,
The pain beneath her eyes,
She's been mistaken,
For someone who rarely cries."
Thanks for your amazing poetry!
can you by chance look at my Story The Blonde girl? that would be great.
Keep up the amazing work!

C. Lee Battaglia

[Owl's Wing]

Beautiful...what it reminds me of is deep thought.

[Pixieblue]

Good ideas and the way they have been eloped together is very well done.
But the layout if you read it aloud doesn't work as well as it could, and i really like this.

"As soon as my fist makes impact,

I realize it's confidence,

I seem to lack."

The rest of it goes together perfectly, just this part is played out differently to the others and it made me fall over my words a little bit.

[Micheal Firth]

Love the last stanza, and the second last. You must have started getting into it more and more as you wrote and eventually just flowed out. Confidence is something a lot of people battle with (from my experience especially writers), not so much in expression but in character and overall posture. Anyway I'll stop rambling, thanks for the read!

[Vian]

"Its an ungodly look,/ the pain beneath her eyes" I really love that line. it makes me think, that god's children shouldn't cry, they should be happy. I really love that Its beautiful! Thank you for writing.

[Fluffy Mamma]

Interesting poem. I liked it. Lies fogging the air to where you can't see. Good concept. Great work

[revalatia]

nicely worded.. I feel similar emotions whence catching my image, mocking me through distorted reflection .. good stuff.

[justjenn_2u]

Raw and uninhibited. Respect for a well written poem with a rant that packs a punch.

[Felicity's Eve]

I'm glad you're back for now! I'm sure that Twin Blades will be spectacular, considering how long its taken. This is a great poem. I feel like everyone is looking into their own glass...trying to find themselves amongst all the pain... It can be a very twisted process.

100/100

[The Fallen]

Yeah. I hope it's as good as my friends and teacher claim it is. Im just not sure :/ I didn't get as far as I had hoped...
And thank you :)

[Felicity's Eve]

Yeah... I'm editing Casonia and it's a thousand times better than the first draft... But I'm still not totally confident and I'm not sure I'll ever be entirely confident in my work. :/

And you're welcome! :)

[The Fallen]

I know what you mean -.- I spent ten months on just half of the book. Changed the prologue like fifty times, edited the first chapter many times as well. Then skipped chapters, then had to go back and do them and they were ten times better then the chapters after them. It was just really frustrating, because I had to nail the characters. It's being handed in on Thursday to my teacher for my final project, and I didn't reach my goal but I got farther then I expected I guess, and it's better than it would have been...

[Felicity's Eve]

I re-wrote my Casonia prologue and posted it. But I unpublished all the other chapters.

[The Fallen]

XD I'm not putting anything on here that is really important to me. I just cant risk it. >.< Plus, my teacher gave me this huge lecture about putting my book on a site where it can be copied and pasted soooo...It wont be on here -.-

[The Fallen]

Ill go read your prologue though

[Felicity's Eve]

Lol yeah. That's why I unpublished Casonia. I've basically figured out my consistant readers :)
read moreLol yeah. That's why I unpublished Casonia. I've basically figured out my consistant readers :)

But I am posting the second book on a private tumblr blog :)

[The Fallen]

Tumblr is such a hassle for me, I would totally do that, but it's not exactly worth It for me -.- no one is really 'reading' Twin Blades, so for me to make a page would be to much work :/ But for you it's a good idea since you do have many consistent readers.

[Felicity's Eve]

Yeah. But it doesn't take too terribly long once you get the hang of it. It's kind of like making a WC chapter, in my opinion :)

[The Fallen]

Yeah I guess so, but I suck at making tumblr thingys in my opinion. I have a blog on there, and it's alright, but Idk about making a private blog, I honestly don't get how to set it up, and all that stuff

[Felicity's Eve]

Like I said, it's kind of like making a WC ch. :)

[The Fallen]

Wc makes It so simple -.- I don't see how it's like wc at all xD

[Felicity's Eve]

Lol XD It does take some getting used to.

[The Fallen]

XD yeah most things do.
Tm I was thinking about sending a few people the new prologue to the book. Do you want me to send it to you?

[Felicity's Eve]

Yes! I'd love to read it!:D

[The Fallen]

Alright awesome! Ill send it to you tomorrow then :)

[Felicity's Eve]

Great!!! Can't wait to read it!!! :)