Cracked Porcelain

hi! in a way this is about bullying and being the bystander; wanting to help, but not being able to. words destroy us because we are as delicate as porcelain. enjoy!

Ladies and Gentlemen! Look behind this glass.

an ugly puppet girl, broken, cracked.

Imperfection, everyone, look at her!

Smeared makeup, chubby for sure!

the master insults his puppet and the crowd thinks its fun.

they all join in, except for one person in the crowd,

an escaped puppet boy, with frayed strings,

he desperately reaches his arms out.

the puppet girl is breaking,

falling apart.

he wishes he could reach through the glass,

to hold her heart.

she sees the boy, and wants to reach for him,

but sadly,

her cruel master forbids.

she's almost crumbled away from his hurtful hits.

the boy watched in pain as the girl fell away,

the girl was just glad to no longer feel pain.

the onlookers cheered and the puppet master bowed.

and our poor puppet boy turned away from the dissolving crowd.

the people stopped laughing and the whole crowd had to go,

then the puppet master tipped his hat, 

and looked for someone else to control.

 

Author's Note

i've never written something like this before, please tell me what you think!

Reviews

[Trigorin]

I really, really like your imagery and tone in this. I think you've managed to hit on the right degree of investment on the speaker's part and I really do like your word choice - very descriptive and vivid. I do think, though, that you're trying perhaps a little too hard and a little too consciously. If you just let things flow, it won't feel as forced.

[Blue Belle]

It's neat that you have written this type of situation in such a fictional way. I think the association of being a puppet and being bullied went very well together. There is a really great story behind this. I feel like I've just read this poem as a short story because the message is so strong that it stays with the reader and opens his/her eyes to keep playing the scene/story over again, as if it were longer. Take Care! Stay Strong! :)