Write Out Of The Blue

This one is a new poem with a not so new theme for me, but alas I think I have finally got it right this time.

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

Write Out of the Blue

Will I ever write my way out of this blue?

Penned to page; spinning thoughts.

This way, and that n round.

 

Said it upside down, inside out, and true.

Shouted it from a mountain high;

I am trying to get you out of here.

 

Try, but can’t seem to think you out of me.  

I want to reason our love away.

Do the math, say goodbye.

 

Thoughts of you won’t stay away or out.

Crowd my heart with your love,

Of sweetness, deeply drank.

 

But you’re gone; I’m not done writing yet.

Gave me years of poetry’s fire.

You lifted me, I inspire.

 

Thank you my all, now I lay thee to rest.

I have danced with loves best.

You taught me; I love.

 

Now I write

 

 

 

Author's Note

I think I can finally lay him to rest...I danced with the best. My thanks to the artist of this haunting picture; if you know who it is, please let me know so I may give proper credit.

Reviews

[Holly Mason]

what a sad coming to life tale you have spun
didn't even know it was yours till I got here that title just grabbed me
the art is haunting...agreed
thank you for your lovely words

[David Lewis Paget]

There is an ineffable sadness about this piece, which would wring the heart of anyone who has lost somebody that close. Mechanically, it could do with a little more punctuation, but the message comes across loud and clear.

[Veronica Chandler]

Thanks David...Lord knows I can use all the advice I can get. I did try my hand at adding punctuation to this one, but I am not certain about how to use punctuation in poetry, so please update me if you have a mind to.

[David Lewis Paget]

You need to add a couple of spaces at the top of your text to get it away from the picture. Then just comma after 'math', 'sweetness', 'lifted me'.

[Veronica Chandler]

I am more than blessed that your mastery is a light guiding me through this unfamiliar forest of words.

[Jeremy Baker]

I like your expression of the way writing is a cartharsis and cleansing force. It's very pretty and lovely to read. Thank you for sharing this.

[A*Meadows]

"I want to reason our love away." This piece grabs your attention and makes you want to keep reading.

[Poetic Beauty]

this is get imagery and sometimes no matter how hard we try we have to go through the emotions before we can finally lay it to rest. The imagery is beautiful and the flow of this poem we done well.

[Neva Flores Smith - Cha..]

Veronica, I cried as I read this. I too had to write my goodbye to my love that has passed from this world. Reading this makes me want to share and I think I will. ((hugs))