The overlook

She smelled like gum and cigarettes
holding the edge of the car door
as Her senses became dulled
witless visitors shuffled nearby
in tones of taciturn pillaging
they who needed this image
thought only of the breaking vista
snapping the pictures clipping on frames
not the broken woman, clinging
to free falling gasps
leapt over steps
She stared deep into the gorge
knowing it was Hers someday
and She would take the plunge
for right now in the present
She rested, puffing on
another lucky strike
grateful She hadn't hit bottom

Reviews

[Girl Friday (Sarah W.)]

She stared deep into the gorge
knowing it was Hers someday
and She would take the plunge -- love these lines.

This was an interesting piece...and I could picture it quite vividly. Vacationers, stopping at the overlooks, snapping photos that will probably never be downloaded from their memory cards, but they still have to HAVE them. And then there is the real beauty of life, or rather mystery, standing there smoking a cigarette and she is completely overlooked. I'm interested in the use of capitalization of "She" and "Her", etc., this leads me to believe that some "godly" importance has been placed upon this woman, and that leads me to thoughts of metaphors. Well done...thought provoking indeed.

[Souladareatease]

Hehehehe Thank You for Your Deep Reading Dear Friday-I appreciate that SO VERY much!!!
something of me----ANY Write where I can Double the use of word for a Womans name or innuendo ...I will capitalize everytime....guys are always lowercase unless the beginning of a sentence...She, Her, Woman etc. is ALWAYS so in all My Writes---One its a respect thing...two...THEY ARE the center of the poem tale---so importance laid on all that is center of tale...it was a spur Write--with the Words--She smelled like Gum and cigarettes ...and that's what I saw in the vision of that :)--Thank You My Friend!!!

[Girl Friday (Sarah W.)]

Well, who could argue with that logic?! Certainly not me!!! :)

[Souladareatease]

:) :)

[Sami Khalil]

"She would take the plunge
for right now in the present
She rested, puffing on
another lucky strike
grateful She hadn't hit bottom"
I get the feeling you are portraying metaphorically the state of our abyss and in this case a woman who is hitting rock bottom almost . She is still holding on to the hope ( I take it as the edge ) and where she has a chance or chances of making it...I could be wrong but That is what I'm getting in this great write...:)