Drops in time

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

Drops form
a line
then...

trickles down
dusting day
Your eyes and mine
swept and kept

sacred
 
blinking
into
existence
past paths
rose today
a test dons
Dante's Peak
black stone
and an Orient
expressed
the travel
the birth
when all came first
floating
as The wind
under butterflies
wings
gliding and guiding
with the jet stream

streaking
 
colors
not yet seen
and yet...
minds eye
and eyes that shine
cared for dreams
that hid inside
battling wreckage
of
pieces lingering
broken
beaten
shattered
as past
when we both looked
to the glass
kissing the images
forgotten
and crafted
smiling to the fates
as a past remembers

what all has come
and awe its weight
can You really
retaliate
where we dropped
in time
the question
of connection
physicality
obsession
is to rhyme
not to reason
whether Love
is in season
images erect
as too the looks
You project

but the tongues
tied
Yours sublime
speaks our secrets
woven
stitching, knitting
crocheting
hours
spinning the crystal
with hands entwined

does the soul good
as our Hearts beat
seeing the proofs
of negatives leveled
two drops
from Heavens send
ink
us
under the skin   


   








 

Reviews

[quinfinn]

this isn't a poem. it is a work of art!

[Souladareatease]

You mean Arthur that crazy guy that weaves baskets on the street downtown?
no...he didn't collab on this...that man is a touch scary with that glint of kill in his eye...Thank You for reading Kind Quin!!!

[Rita L. Sev]

The form in this poem creates the flow of those drops forming that line... Love the metaphor of "tongues
tied,Yours sublime speaks our secrets, woven stitching, knitting, crocheting..."

Well done!

[Souladareatease]

:) so very Kind Rita...I thank You for visiting My humble writes!!!

[quinfinn]

i am humbled by your humbleness.....

[Souladareatease]

too kind Sir

[Rita L. Sev]

Soul, you are humble - but your writes are majestic!

[Souladareatease]

...You guys are baaad--But I thank You for saying such sweet things-the ego floats indeed!!!

[Sami Khalil]

I really like the form and the droplets of words in each line written by a magnificent pen.

[Souladareatease]

Thank You so much Sami...I have really been getting into that style of form with a few writes...I like the simplicity of it...at the same time...I hate to stay stuck with one certain kind...and as I have been messing with that order there...I find it hard not to...break my lines up like that to their simple 2-4 word lines...and i'm a sucker for three...like haiku thought to longer ponderings lol I thank You Sir!!!

[Sami Khalil]

I do the same too. You are welcome...:)

[Shaun Payton]

Oh my goodness, I think ive read an ageless poem. Soul your elegant, thoughtful caring words come down like rain on a window pane. Im not as easy a critic as some may think, this is a looking-glass of times and bonds. Absolutely amazing.

[Souladareatease]

Humbled Kind Sir-appreciate that very Much Shaun!!!

[Shaun Payton]

A due review, you are welcome Soul:)