Nebula

Thornbird, dark stars

 

I hear Her
cries
in the night
Her sighs
to the day
as wolfs howl
innocent pains
Children
of the mountain
mist
among the rain
deepened
creeping in
of the quiet
throws
and
blankets
to
our countryside
We sprawl
out
sifting
Our share
in time
stars
they keep
falling
as we
sweep up
dust
putting
to palms
the two of us
within the dark
we strike a match
and to that light
both are half
holding the other
steadfast
Intact
make no mistake
A Thornbird
on a wave
dives
into the sun
mirrored
in set
of everyone

Author's Note

Latin title

Reviews

[Petra Vlah]

Simply splendid! There is a lot of clarity (both thought and sensibility) in this nebula; everything flows perfectly and the rhythm of the poem is incredibly suggestive of falling stars and meteors "diving into the sun"
"stars
they keep
falling
as we
sweep up
dust
putting
to palms
the two of us
within the dark
we strike a match
and to that light
both are half
holding the other
steadfast
Intact"

[Souladareatease]

I thank You so much for Your kind words Petra-thank You for reading me!!!

[MOON]

Beautiful write the nightsky and stars and we are one walking together and supporting each other . Love the flow.

[Souladareatease]

Thank You so much Moon--Indeed!!!

[jacob erin-cilberto]

yes, and the beauty of this poem spills like falling stars, with its very short lines dropping down and down...

pure magic.

[Souladareatease]

Thank You so much Jacob--Humbled Sir i'm glad You liked this--it is a personal favourite!!!

[Vikrantsingh]

Lovely narration mate and really felt the string of hold. Very well driven and explained :)

We sprawl
out
sifting
Our share
in time
stars
they keep
falling
as we
sweep up
dust
putting
to palms
the two of us

Loved it :)
- Singh :)

[Souladareatease]

I Thank You Greatly Sir...apologies for getting back to this comment so late...Very kind of You to take the time for my paltry Writes!!! Be well!!!

[Vikrantsingh]

You're welcome :)

[Thomas Fitzgerald]

A telling and precise piece that reads perfectly!

[Souladareatease]

I thank You Thomas, appreciate the read!!!

[Souladareatease]

Just amazing, I found this. So connected, the stars in our galaxy are. I found it interesting how you did wrote this down, into a perfect long flow, almost as a connection between the stars.
I didn't forget you, I always come back, for art like yours.

Philosophical, and dreamy...

- Elisa

[Souladareatease]

So kind Elisa, greatly appreciate the visit and swelling my head a bit:)

You're most welcome, friend, I will read more more and more, for a long time, I couldn't be on, but catching up. Subscribed to you so I can't miss a write :)

[Souladareatease]

Understood-time is fickle-Most appreciated- I will catch up to You and Your fine writes as well!!!read moreUnderstood-time is fickle-Most appreciated- I will catch up to You and Your fine writes as well!!!
never hurries never worries of such things.

[Brandon S. Whitten]

Splendid read and write. Become aware of the universe within and see all we are.

[Souladareatease]

Indeed;) I thank You Sir for the visit and kind words-greatly appreciated!!!

[Sethnicity]

I admire the exploration the flow of this really coincides with the theme.
Highly metaphoric and nimble. you ran the course of this poem like a deer in the thick of the woods. making away when there seems to be no way. Good write.

[Souladareatease]

Kind words Seth-Greatly appreciated-it's nice to see You about again My Friend:) Thank You for the read and kind words!!!

[Kristallo]

This is exceptionally lovely. It's so vibrant and bursting with colorful imagery that showcases a love that transcends organic space and temporal time. It's just beautiful. Wonderfully written poem, I so admired it.

[Souladareatease]

I have very missed You Kris I hope You are smiling-thank You for the kind words and stopping in for a read:)

[Kristallo]

I'll be around to read more of your graceful visions. It was my pleasure. :)

[Zahra]

This in amazing, you're expressed so much in brief lines, really very well penned

[Souladareatease]

Awww I thank You Voice-so good to see You :)-glad You liked:)