LET US BE AS

 

How are You
So sweet
flavored
as amazing
misted
on
My spring day tongue
 
I arrive to tell You
today
is upon us  
I'm home
 
anxious
is Your man
to know deep

thoughts  
I stretch out  

 
Love...
let us be as

ONE
hidden
shading
each other
from flights
to a midday sun
deep heat in deed
our lips dipped in X
poured upon slick backs
washing cascading tending
this bountiful Garden of we
Given
we praise
legs enfolded
scents of oneness
blown softened bliss
as kisses come crashing
heat ever blazed impassion
burning perfect endless desire
that which delivers perfect fire
where
licking
from the flames
dance white hot sayings
praying
perfect incantation
tastings

to speak in tongues
come
my lovely one
in chant

dive
down here close
my Dear near

Twogether
In selfless scry

Love...
let us be as

Reviews

[Astro]

I liked this poem, because of that longing for unity, of a sensual partnership participating, mimicking creating a symbiotic whole, a oneness. The flow, doesn't exactly cascade, but each word a vivid image or feeling rising and falling, pleading to hold on to the pervading desire. Then on another level, the reader has a 'read between the lines' kind of feeling where there seems to be a deeper message than what is plain to see.

[Souladareatease]

Thanks Astro, the rhythm is off time... on time runs in legato speed off time runs 4/3 made i...i set it styled that way to represent how life and love is...it is disjointed and off-kilter then runs in smooth flow...then hits bumps again....ever back in forth from on and off...such as life ever is...thanks for the deep Look much appreciated!!!

[Astro]

You're welcome. The deepness of your word was felt.

[Girl Friday (Sarah W.)]

Personally, I quite loved this one...the feeling and emotion was palpable and tangible. I could sense the longing and the desire just to BE and be one WITH someone. We so want to be connected as humans; we push people away when we should be drawing them closer. Many thoughts evoked by this one this morning, my friend. I shall carry them with me this day.

[Souladareatease]

So Greatly appreciated Friday:))) made me smile big:))) You read indeed-thank You!!!

[Rita L. Sev]

The rhythm of this piece forces off-kilter pauses that made me slow down and really think about the preceding words. It makes the poem take on a deeper feel - gentle and frenzied at the same time - like love an certainly be. Beautiful write.

[Souladareatease]

Excellent read of me Rita, greatly appreciated...yes indeed...tis the rhythm.
appreciate Your time:)

[Dhaye]

Let us be as... as life goes like a wind,
sometimes tender and sometimes wild
and our love like the sea
deep and mysterious
and forever let us be as
until the future is in our hands.

I love your piece, S. That's love. That's life. :)

[Souladareatease]

Indeed true Dhaye the giver of it---Thank You for Your kinds words!!!

[Angi]

The way this reads, it's like breathing. Lovely, lovely work.

[Souladareatease]

It was:) Thank You for reading me Angi :)

[quinfinn]

a lot of depth and personal information here, i feel as if you are rejoining with a familiar lover, but it feels marked by prolonged absence....still, a warm and deeply touching write.

[Souladareatease]

Indeed right You are on both counts---tis distance in the physical sense that makes it so---one day all will be right with the world......right?...please say it's so...

[quinfinn]

but of course....you have to believe, even if it breaks your heart

[Frieda P]

I like this, it's kind of sensual, chaotic and enticing all at the same time, not sure if I like the formatting of the tree shapes, or arrows, not sure that adds to this lovely poetry...I take it 'selfless scry' is a typo, cry?

[Souladareatease]

Hehehe thank You for Yor honesty Frieda:))) and kind words...only representation of symmetry ...look at my comment to astro...it may make better sense...and to scry is done with a mirror...it is a form of fortune telling. and well...eyes...they are windows to the Soul...forms of mirrors upon things experienced or known.
thank You Very much for the read and comment:)

[Sami Khalil]

A real Romeo in disguise . I like the write and the art form . It shows you are creative...:)

[Souladareatease]

Thank You Sami Much appreciated!!!

[Sami Khalil]

My pleasure...:)

[Rob Santana]

Whoa!!! Man!! I bet panties just come flying off when you read this one to a female, hahaha. Incredible words here. Romeo has nothing on you!! I really like the format, looks awesome.

[Souladareatease]

Lol HA!!! don't I wish...Thank You Creeper Very much!!! appreciated, been messing with forms a lot lately...some good some pure bombs lol