WINE FED HAIKU

 

 

(spring)

 

Given time I melt

like springtime in a bottle

does a winter freeze

 

 

Heartbeats like wings carry

the edge of Persephone

Always in rebirth

 

Lady of the Sun

glistening orchid of chance

dew drop lovers tongue

     

(summer)

 

Living life fully

basking middays summer fun

Lovers on the run

 

 

Taking to the road

we the heat blowing just so

clothe ourselves in love

 

 

While dripping essence

full Hearts Sun carries his glow

beside Her presence

 

 

          (Fall)

 

caress of our Hands

soothing fall breezes blowing

within step we dance

 

 

Stone circle wraps Us

In Autumns fiery embrace

as we tend the fire

 

camping under stars

A browned leaf crunches loudly

under our two feet

 

 

        (Winter)

 

Happily a hearth

Is warm to the needs of love

the grand couple pleased

 

atop visions stance

snow drifts as two lovers kiss

holding time ever tender

 

 

they walk pale blue light

grafted upon snow owls wings

Flying as one Heart and Soul

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

Reviews

[Girl Friday (Sarah W.)]

Beautiful imagery in this one. I love the Haiku format. I also love chained Haiku, which is what you have created here. My first published piece was actually a chain of Haiku about the beach. Anyway...you've stuck to the format and created something pretty special here. Nicely done.

[Souladareatease]

chained Haiku;) thankYou:) Thank You Kindly for the read and kind comment:) and the new term:)
read morechained Haiku;) thankYou:) Thank You Kindly for the read and kind comment:) and the new term:)

[Girl Friday (Sarah W.)]

Well, I don't know if it's a true literary term, but it's what the publisher called my piece...lol

[Souladareatease]

works for me and I thak You ...and I shall think of it as so:)

[Rob Santana]

You have a graceful way with words my friend.Meditation through words, well done.

[Souladareatease]

Thanks Creeper You are too kind!!! Horns up My Friend!!!!!!!!!!!!

[Souladareatease]

...and thanks for reading me!!!

[Lily Mae]

You amaze me with every new write..xo

[Souladareatease]

Thank You Dear Mae ---You are too kind My Dear---a tad cumbersome write I think for the elegance of Haiku- this is an attempt I SHOULD have done slow...but You know me---blazing saddles to try something new--always afraid the thought will escape instead of slowing and well....thinking the feel

[icelandicblue]

You've crafted a chain of beautiful images written with the brevity and resonance of the haiku. This was quite beautiful and skillfully crafted.

[Souladareatease]

Thank You-Humbled By Your words!!!

[The Creation]

summer is my favorite part... wine tastes best at that time as well. great work. a literary drink for the heart and mind.

[Souladareatease]

Thank You Creation for visiting and Your Kind comments!!!
You Shall see summers again My Friend.
Indeed the wine flows best upon Summertime time:)

[poetry-kiddo alienbaba]

try Hennessy

*_^

[Souladareatease]

Lol thanks- I hate beer lol

[poetry-kiddo alienbaba]

oi...its not heinekin beer..
its hennessy vintage moonshine

[quinfinn]

i couldn't live without me beer! it is me panacea! me first love! me daily medication!

[poetry-kiddo alienbaba]

its good for kidding the stones so they say

[Souladareatease]

Lol:) surrounded by moonshiners and Foamheads...well hell...all are represented here now---time to throw down our swill and stagger about---"I Love You Guys"

[poetry-kiddo alienbaba]

i mean its good for kidney stones
beer is

[quinfinn]

actually, i much prefer a well rolled chronic special....au natural and chock full o'vitamins.......

[Souladareatease]

yes yes...I too loved the stones at one time too, took a shine to 'em You might say

[Souladareatease]

...
and damn them kids hurt

[quinfinn]

rainy day women #'s 12 and 35........

[Souladareatease]

That's #2 here and a tattoo too You

[poetry-kiddo alienbaba]

now Aerosmiths Tyler is copying the Jagger...while Rosey Axl of gnr is worshiping the Steve

[poetry-kiddo alienbaba]

slash is busy doin the Brianmay step...and Steve why is caught in the malmsteen trap

[quinfinn]

alien baba dude.....you need to listen to "show biz kids" by steely dan! it is on youtube.....

[poetry-kiddo alienbaba]

oh thse kidz must be good...
i will beam em up like scotty
thx u beauty

[Souladareatease]

indeed... I tend to fancy the royal scam...Malmsteems got flamenco but hard to git outta it least steves done genre time...may indeed

[poetry-kiddo alienbaba]

and the theater dream ended like sour cream for petrucci

[Souladareatease]

LOL indeed it sure did---thankfully-snore

[Souladareatease]

do the Vinnie Moore trip too-this decades been around almost as long as Vai

[quinfinn]

pound for pound and blow by blow, jeff beck is the greatest guitar player ever....

[Souladareatease]

blow by blow is my favorite (of his)(get live at Ronnie Scotts--worth it)....but....O man Quin Dems fightn' words!!!

[quinfinn]

interesting and unique use of haiku format...this one literally sings!

[Souladareatease]

Thanks Quin...I don't know muchado about them...never tried...I saw Yours whilst perusing and then saw I have a voice's Haiku .....made me think----so thank YOU Sir...twas neat

[quinfinn]

well, the big secret that no one talks about until they wanna show off is that the haiku always deals purely with nature...and the senryu is about anything human or philosophical or weird. this is what i am told.....

[Souladareatease]

Lol...that's what I was saying to rita down there Lol I no nuthin; of it...as I said...then did the lazy a*s research on Wiki--and saw the season thing...and thought the aha!!! definitely no showin off here Lol it was a bit cumbersome....I keep trying to do different styles of writes now and again...because...I don't know forms period...no...learned knowledge...just what I have seen others do...and where others have pointed help to me...I used to write real chaotic...and still fancy that from time to time lol...but many detest it Lol

[quinfinn]

writerscafe has taught me much through the various kind and helpful writers over the last two years. it is a great place to make friends who love tho share their knowledge.

[Souladareatease]

And I thank You for it Quin!!!( You too Rita:)

[quinfinn]

oi, de nada....

[Rita L. Sev]

Very cool use of Haiku format to pay homage to the Seasons! I especially enjoyed "Winter"; made me think of snow days with my husband.. :) Very nice!

[Souladareatease]

Thank You Ritavery much:))) awww i'm glad it made You think that...how awesome!!! ...I was reading up on them...(in the quick lazy way of I) And saw that originally they always referenced the season in some way of the #7 .....animals that signify a season...or other trademarks of it...so...I tried to break down the seasons (drunk on love)