She studied Psychosophy

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

Fluorescein outlined Her lips
Full, puckering and pursed
spraying accentuated dogma
upon her supple wrists

I smiled, how could I not
such Beauty borne is velvet
forever

Taking strands of silver
I wrapped it around my Heart
better than gold these loops
meticulously stitched and sewn

Breathing Breezes blown cadence  
sun swings above, radiant  
straddling stratosphere

Peppered as the seasons
black, white, green and red
hue curried sparkle-eyed tongue

listen this one
sounds sing

songs tracing hearts
heated beat

evenings being
mornings painted glory

carrying the flame
You inspire

As we step
Todays Tomorrows 






  

Reviews

[Muse]

I agree with Kristallo, this read like velvet, soft and buttery smooth. Your poem was so delicate, I was almost afraid to read you more than twice in fear that the words might break a syllable or two. Like lace that cannot be washed, or like paper that cannot be left out in the sun...

Tenderness was found in your fragile creativity.

[Souladareatease]

Awww Why Thank You ever so much TCL!!!
Humbled by such Beautiful praise, I am not worthy, but The ego shall feast upon those fine praises as if famished!!! I thank You So much!!!

[quinfinn]

reading this was strikingly similar to drinking a fine amaretto liqueur, easy on the palate and smooth all the way down, with a warming sensation which lingers with no foul aftertaste. wonderful metaphor combined with velveteen imagery which soothes the soul and invigorates the heart and mind. well penned!

[Souladareatease]

Quick, My God Quin...Thank You for such kind words...humbled greatly!!!

[Kristallo]

This is stunning. "Such beauty borne is velvet forever." I adore that line, it's poetic grace incarnate... this poem is absolutely radiant and alive with vividly surreal imagery and whispers of romance. Some of the wording here is just brilliant, and so unique, that I found myself in awe of your craft. Truly, you are a writer that speaks from the cadence of his soul, your style is dreamy and delicate, it's such a pleasure to wrap up in them as if in shelter from the storm... also, wanted to point out how gorgeously perfect I found this section to be:

Breathing Breezes blown cadence
sun swings above, radiant
straddling stratosphere

Truly inspiring... don't ever change a thing, this is stoned immaculate exactly how it is! Great work.

[Souladareatease]

Ahhhh so kind... Stoned Immaculate--why thank You:)
and whispered romance...I am ALWAYS a sucker for this...it makes the bulk of my writes I think lol....shelter from the storm....AWWW swell my head!!!
and change never....I cringe upon many past writes when I go back and read...but I detest re-writes...rare if EVER will I rewrite a work...it was borne of and in the moment in my minds eye so there it stays...if I think re-write...it is better as a whole new work upon the same idea.......to recapture energy felt during a write can never be for me...it is always the rolling ball of mercury to be manipulated...but frozen in time as a painting once set forth.
Thank You so very much!!!

[Kristallo]

Lol, it was my pleasure. :) And yeah, I know what you mean about cringing when you read older works- I do, too! But I found that if I rework it, it loses the same energy and turns into something else completely, so the original piece is gone forever... something to stay away from. rolling ball of mercury, nice! So clever. ;)