Alone in vanity

an Heir brushed , swathed

in the day wrapped fragrant

by cooing doves lilac strands

perched high and proud

light rays beam,  colour streaks

adorns the one  vanity speaks

ever beside tiers statue in life


ruffle the plumage tarry naught

sayeth the frog aside in the dark


yellow bells ring sympathy, to thee

for thou will croak before I

never knowing, true doves cry

only warbles at Your feet

as I  see it, in bliss I sit


awaiting my one princess kiss

tender to the night song, shining

bright as a new dawn, whispering

screamed chants upon wiles of the hour

holding baby's breath and the other hand

but tell to me O bird of preen

how long can one bake in that sun

Reviews

[quinfinn]

your poetry flows as a river of honey, sweet and lingering upon the tongue as it is read aloud. i thought i had witnessed many fine poet in these pages but you have shown me that there is much talent out there still unseen by too many. i simply must tell my friends to read your art, for it is truly beautiful!

[Souladareatease]

Your FAR too kind Quin of fine mind...these are my more refined writes...I have many cumbersome...thank You for such kind words--I am deeply humbled.

[quinfinn]

awesome stuff....

[Frieda P]

Wow this is magical and tragic at the same time... exquisitely pen'd little rant here, you've taken this art form to a whole new level with this one. Scathing read with loads of class tucked aside. Just a stunning read.

[Souladareatease]

Too kind Frieda :) Much appreciate the read and sweet comment!!!
-everything is magic with tinges of sadness eh?

[Frieda P]

Or, mad with tinges of magic, my pleasure.

[Souladareatease]

Hehehehe :)))

[Frieda P]

;-)

[Dhaye]

We feel complete if we have our partner in life...because it's too sad to live alone in this world. Every king needs a queen. Every prince needs a princess. Every man needs a woman. And so as the woman needs a man.
Nice poem and choice of words, and also the picture. :)

[Souladareatease]

This is true...Thank You kindly!

[Kristallo]

It's nerdy to point it out, but I just love that you used the word 'plumage.' I really like that one but I so rarely have an opportunity to use it.. :P ... there is some excellent word choice here:

yellow bells ring sympathy, to thee
for thou will croak before I
never knowing, true doves cry

This is a delicate and refreshingly realistic expression for love. It doesn't ring of some idealistic romanticized dream of what we envision a 'perfect' love to be. It's reachable, somewhat rueful, and written with an airy finesse that I found to be enigmatic and unique. Very well done.

[astronaut]

You're a brilliant poet, so instead of commenting on all your poems I'll comment here. :)

[Souladareatease]

Your Too kind-Humbled
(more of a dim-scribbler)

[astronaut]

=]

[Muse]

Wow this is a breath of fresh solar air. I adored the whimsy in this, for example:

screamed chants upon wiles of the hour

holding baby's breath and the other hand

I pictured a moment of stillness, innocence, lacking all greys...warm thoughts tempered within the beauty of prism and light.

New english that felt styled..original, yet old.

[Souladareatease]

Thank You very much, I'm humbled.
Always a bit tongue in cheek tucked in a line somewhere--borne smartass;) (love it when people catch my drift--Not everyone catches things like baby's breath....certain things and meanings are dying away in the minds--in this I feel sad for the young--or us...not sure which lol...thank You Dear Muse!!!

[Muse]

very surreal..art in every respect.

[AYVID N]

Yes, it's lonely at the top, at the helm of all that majestic beauty and splendor. And the wait for the princess's kiss seems just too long. Magical words of love and fervor written with a flourish here Souladareatease.

And please also accept my compliments for the amazing artwork you chose for this equally incredible poetry. It just set the mood for an evening of pensive thinking! Loved it!

[Souladareatease]

Thank You Divya You are too kind and true with Your Life observations...the artwork was chosen before the write:) it was a contest to write a poem based upon the artwork----a MOST lovely picture I HAD to write something for it!!!

[AYVID N]

And you wrote so beautifully and convincingly...I could just picture the wait. Great work! Thanks!

[Souladareatease]

...always steal a bit of truth to our writes eh???

[AYVID N]

:) I agree...great art does inspire us to steal their beauty and package it in words :)

[Souladareatease]

...if not all lol

[AYVID N]

:))) yes, even a little is enough! Lol!

[Leslie Philibert]

a poem written with classic 19th romanticism, with the 2nd person thou, and sayeth, so some good ideas here, like the use of the zeugma with heir not hair, cleverly done

[Souladareatease]

Thank you for the kind words and time---humbled
it was a work borne from a contest, to write something pertaining to the picture...