As above from below
A Poem by Souladareatease
 from the heights as in the Haight
I saw from above, the walk below
feet at the edge, river styx
waving to the ferry man
with a wink and a smile,
I kept my thin dime
turning around, Yes indeed
Another Mile
The fun one, rooted
in rudimentary beginnings
taking the long way out
was just a way
to see the sights sound their twinkle downs
as they glaze
craggy edged surfaces of the rock walls
stop me if You've heard this one...
never mind, different,
words same language,
saying siestas sail snores sounding supranaturalistic sallowness
"arise chicken arise"
walking upon bones of the beaten brethren
to dine thy daily bread, crumbed, flaked
upon angel hair
I gazed upon that one star, my night sky high
© 2013 Souladareatease
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This is really interesting, I enjoyed it. The final stanza made me think of a zombie chicken (not sure if you were going for that, ha).. "walking upon bones of the beaten brethren." The way you described his sad chicken family becoming the topping of a pasta was sinister, in a perfect tongue-in-cheek sort of way. The last line is stunning, a perfect ending for the visual macrocosm of life that you've described. Good write..
Posted 11 Years Ago
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11 Years Ago
Lol I am glad You liked-im humbled...lol funny You say that...it is a line where a voodoo priest is .. read moreLol I am glad You liked-im humbled...lol funny You say that...it is a line where a voodoo priest is only knowledgeable in raising dead chickens....yet he is trying to revive a human...it was to play on two ways...the way You outlined.....and to represent me...being brought back to life walking amongst the world unlike the ancestors...to taste life again because of a Woman (Angel hair, night sky star) ...thank You for such a thoughtful review:)
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11 Years Ago
I see! I can't believe the double meaning surpassed me before, but of course it was very early and b.. read moreI see! I can't believe the double meaning surpassed me before, but of course it was very early and before my morning coffee, I can definitely see the romanticism more clearly now as I re-read..... but, any poem including a zombie chicken is top notch in my book. I'll definitely be reading more of yours.
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11 Years Ago
Lol crack me up...not too asleep to catch the zombie though...many miss that reference...so that's o.. read moreLol crack me up...not too asleep to catch the zombie though...many miss that reference...so that's one better...You looked deeper first!!! that's uptown!!! I tend to read things too fast and miss details...bites me in the a*s sometimes.
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11 Years Ago
Yes, i'm sure that's what happened with me as well... I also tend to over-analyze words, in a way th.. read moreYes, i'm sure that's what happened with me as well... I also tend to over-analyze words, in a way that has me missing the simplicity of it. It's a hard habit to break.
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11 Years Ago
Indeed...I feel Ya...The Mind moves quick eh? Tis a good thing too in many respects......I overanaly.. read moreIndeed...I feel Ya...The Mind moves quick eh? Tis a good thing too in many respects......I overanalyze and see things that aren't there......I've had people kind of get mad because I think there talking deep when they are simply laying it on the surface...I have felt so dumb at times over reading...I have a friend who writes haiku and Tanka ....talk about ...open for interpretation lol
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11 Years Ago
Oh, i've been admonished for the same thing on occasion, so I feel ya! It can be frustrating, or at .. read moreOh, i've been admonished for the same thing on occasion, so I feel ya! It can be frustrating, or at least conversationally debilitating, when the other person doesn't mean anything richer than the vanilla transparency of any given statement.... guess that's just a vice of my inquisitive nature... and it sounds like i'd like your friend's writing, some of the best writing requires the reader to challenge their imagination and search for their own personal interpretation of the expressions presented.
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11 Years Ago
Read Some of my collabs when You have a chance, most of Her and i's work is call and response type s.. read moreRead Some of my collabs when You have a chance, most of Her and i's work is call and response type set up ...it isn't totally her style but You will see it...we break each other out of our norm... (I mark on the top of the poem Grace and Souladareatese/Odysseus collab---probably Odysseus...I changed my name recently....this is the handle I use on my other site...so...seemed silly to have two pen names for the same writes lol
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11 Years Ago
Yeah, i'll check that out for sure and let you know my thoughts on it.
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11 Years Ago
Theres a few on here penned two-gether....ones a horror write and the others are love proclamations .. read moreTheres a few on here penned two-gether....ones a horror write and the others are love proclamations one professing the other waiting in denial needing the REASONS for the commit....always appreciate Your time and words.
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This is really interesting, I enjoyed it. The final stanza made me think of a zombie chicken (not sure if you were going for that, ha).. "walking upon bones of the beaten brethren." The way you described his sad chicken family becoming the topping of a pasta was sinister, in a perfect tongue-in-cheek sort of way. The last line is stunning, a perfect ending for the visual macrocosm of life that you've described. Good write..
Posted 11 Years Ago
1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
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11 Years Ago
Lol I am glad You liked-im humbled...lol funny You say that...it is a line where a voodoo priest is .. read moreLol I am glad You liked-im humbled...lol funny You say that...it is a line where a voodoo priest is only knowledgeable in raising dead chickens....yet he is trying to revive a human...it was to play on two ways...the way You outlined.....and to represent me...being brought back to life walking amongst the world unlike the ancestors...to taste life again because of a Woman (Angel hair, night sky star) ...thank You for such a thoughtful review:)
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11 Years Ago
I see! I can't believe the double meaning surpassed me before, but of course it was very early and b.. read moreI see! I can't believe the double meaning surpassed me before, but of course it was very early and before my morning coffee, I can definitely see the romanticism more clearly now as I re-read..... but, any poem including a zombie chicken is top notch in my book. I'll definitely be reading more of yours.
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11 Years Ago
Lol crack me up...not too asleep to catch the zombie though...many miss that reference...so that's o.. read moreLol crack me up...not too asleep to catch the zombie though...many miss that reference...so that's one better...You looked deeper first!!! that's uptown!!! I tend to read things too fast and miss details...bites me in the a*s sometimes.
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11 Years Ago
Yes, i'm sure that's what happened with me as well... I also tend to over-analyze words, in a way th.. read moreYes, i'm sure that's what happened with me as well... I also tend to over-analyze words, in a way that has me missing the simplicity of it. It's a hard habit to break.
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11 Years Ago
Indeed...I feel Ya...The Mind moves quick eh? Tis a good thing too in many respects......I overanaly.. read moreIndeed...I feel Ya...The Mind moves quick eh? Tis a good thing too in many respects......I overanalyze and see things that aren't there......I've had people kind of get mad because I think there talking deep when they are simply laying it on the surface...I have felt so dumb at times over reading...I have a friend who writes haiku and Tanka ....talk about ...open for interpretation lol
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11 Years Ago
Oh, i've been admonished for the same thing on occasion, so I feel ya! It can be frustrating, or at .. read moreOh, i've been admonished for the same thing on occasion, so I feel ya! It can be frustrating, or at least conversationally debilitating, when the other person doesn't mean anything richer than the vanilla transparency of any given statement.... guess that's just a vice of my inquisitive nature... and it sounds like i'd like your friend's writing, some of the best writing requires the reader to challenge their imagination and search for their own personal interpretation of the expressions presented.
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11 Years Ago
Read Some of my collabs when You have a chance, most of Her and i's work is call and response type s.. read moreRead Some of my collabs when You have a chance, most of Her and i's work is call and response type set up ...it isn't totally her style but You will see it...we break each other out of our norm... (I mark on the top of the poem Grace and Souladareatese/Odysseus collab---probably Odysseus...I changed my name recently....this is the handle I use on my other site...so...seemed silly to have two pen names for the same writes lol
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11 Years Ago
Yeah, i'll check that out for sure and let you know my thoughts on it.
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11 Years Ago
Theres a few on here penned two-gether....ones a horror write and the others are love proclamations .. read moreTheres a few on here penned two-gether....ones a horror write and the others are love proclamations one professing the other waiting in denial needing the REASONS for the commit....always appreciate Your time and words.
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