The Simply Adorned Temple

The woman that is plain on the outside is the one that has the most to offer on the inside

A plain temple 
Nothing to catch the eye
Any one passing
Will look then pass on by

The walls built
are plain to passersby
made with simple stone
not colored with dye

Treasures untold
hidden by simple stone
go unnoticed 
By those who are gone

Those who venture in 
are the ones who find
the treasures untold 
that boggles the mind

They find something special
missed by passersby
for they looked within
and they find the apple of their eye

Reviews

[A Ghost of Myself]

A plain temple, a play off, 'your body is your temple.'

I believe your second and third stanzas are the strongest, because they speak of the walls or stone built in order to protect from hardship; this in turns question why the walls? This person has been hurt before, wants to remain unseen, but also wants to be found. It's the person who spends the time digging, unearthing the broken relics that finds the treasure, a kindred soul, one worth the adventure. I enjoyed this. My one recommendation, and this is a suggestion is replace 'the apple of their eye' line with another simile/metaphor as its a bit cliché, but overall, well written, well expressed, and enjoyable.

[Stephen]

Thankyou very much for the review and constructive feedback. I will definitely take that and use it to make the poem better. I appreciate the appraisal and the praise and constructive criticism. Much appreciated

[Neville]

This little write of yours contains many more truths than might first meet the eye. A well stated fact of life.... All Good Things, N

[Stephen]

Thanks for reading. I am glad that you liked it and thanks for the appraisal.

[Mr. Box]

A deep poem with amazing words and sentences. I love it.

[Stephen]

Thanks friend!

[Arshia]

I liked the mysterious side of your poem that leaves the reader intrigued..
'Those who venture in are the ones who find the treasures untold!'
Beautifully expressed :)
Good work, Stephen!

[Stephen]

Thanks again friend, for reading and giving your appraisal

[wezev511]

I too like the third - particularly: treasures untold, hidden by simple stone...
suggests beauty and value in the simplest of things

[Stephen]

Thanks for the appraisal my friend

[closed]

opulent in the splendor of its simplicity

i think i will enjoy your style

-Dream

[Stephen]

Thanks! I hope you do like my style. I appreciate the review

[closed]

Not a problem at all. Be sure to reccomend other works for me to check out as well

[DoormanDan]

These words are very true, it's what's on this inside that decides what kind of person we are, not what's on the outside. Overall, this is a strong poem, and on top of that, a one of a kind poem as well. You are easily a very strong writer! :)

[Frank]

L4-'By' not 'bye'

Phrasal Verb: Pass by
Meaning: Go past without stopping
Example: I was just PASSING BY when I saw the accident.
Notes:- Intransitive Help- International English

[Stephen]

Thanks for the review. I need a grammar check every now and then. It is now corrected.

[Matching Socks]

How true it is that so many people are overlooked, not seen or heard when they have so much to offer and contribute. I think responsibility lies on both sides though. We need to do a better job looking below the surface but people also need to come out of their shells, not to flaunt but to show us and lead by example.
We must meet half way. Beautiful poem Stephen and I really hope people take this good advice.

[Stephen]

Thanks Ana! I appreciate you

[Sami Khalil]

Beauty and treasure are within and we should discover their values. Bravo....................

[Stephen]

Thankyou for reading!

[Sami Khalil]

You are welcome...:).................