Cigarette

baby, light me up

you are a cigarette

each drag more

toxic

    ashy

        addictive

than the last

tonight

i'm lighting

you up

-"

Reviews

[Rahul]

I think you've dropped here reality of someone's life that's really happened. I can relate your this piece with real one's...i liked this piece a bit this time but much loved your theme... you've a lot of say it showed by this piece.
keep writing, great write, word're too nnicely penned.

[Coyote Poetry]

Wow. Amazing poetry. Love can be like a cigarette. Addicting and make you want to repeat the action once again and again. Thank you for the outstanding poetry.
Coyote

[Bethany]

You have the amazing gift of putting such meaning into very few words. Amazing.

[Oceana]

Thanks so much, love

[Mother Maggie]

This work is amazing the way it is. The change that you are contemplating would give it more power--more punch and make the double entendere stand out more. I being the firey, bold and lusty celt that I am would make the change--ultimately, tho, it is your work so to change or not to change is your call.

Namaste, you amazingly creative soul

[Oceana]

I think I agree with you here. Thank you for your input and very much for your review :)

[Angi]

I like it just the way it stands. I wanted to say, 'Ohhh, you go, girl!!' When I read the last part. Ha!

[Oceana]

Haha, thanks so much Angi :)

[jacob erin-cilberto]

"let me be your Lucky Strike!"

and we will burn together...in mind and body...

cool metaphor...

jacob

[Oceana]

Love the addition. thanks, as always, Jacob.

[~Nina~]

Interesting. Very symbolic. If you don't mind, I'd love it if you checked out a few of my works. Also, I'd love to befriend you! See you around! Write on!

[Oceana]

Thank you very much. And yes, I definitely will :)

[Entropy of the mind]

The imagery is fantastic. Loved this. It really portrays how a relationship can be in a wonderful metaphor. Keep up the good work

[Oceana]

I'm really intrigued by relationships like this-painful and passionate. Thank you very much for your review:)