Try to Imagine Nothing

Chilled, chided like a child's lover

Caught between fantasy and insurrection

Monster of man yet to become

Power his weakness, leave him so

Fallen to depths only God can know

Soul relinquished to a beggar's fate

Stolen harbinger, caught in the devil's ways

Desperate to become an embodiment of hate

Fragile paradox, a pure man now a sinner's slave

Make your amends, for the dead know their place

Deeds of doubters used to claim paradise

Violent purging, a means to an unreachable end

Complete in silence, all halos inevitably come down

More than just a criminal, a victim of fate's tragic trend

Callow hearted in awaiting a day to die

Fallen lovers unseeing, unburned, unsung

Man's lonely, last ashes lost in a gust of wind

Crosses we bear to which our nooses are hung

Last hymn meant to chastise with words daunting and cruel

It was just a joke my friend, you simply played the fool

Reviews

[Duane Klinger]

fantastic flow! this is a little darker than the others I've read from you but no less amazing. Another great one! Bravo, my friend!
MKLINE

[Omegax45]

Wow. Just...wow. Bravo.

[brenda]

harsh! and wow strong ! loved it and i love the flow and the feeling you put in it!

[Different Wings]

dayum great mix of words and power. deserves the win!

[Esoteric Strand]

There’s a strange emptiness to this piece that I can’t put my finger on. The diction is there, the form is there, the message is there…but something is missing. No matter how many times I read it, the whole thing comes off as cold and distant. Maybe it’s the tone, I’m not sure.

Regards,

E